Increation

Another wonderful poem, Jen! Really intriguing title too. My favourite stanza:

'In my prose, you take on many different shapes
as my fantastic stories twist the truth;
I have written you a thousand times or more,
but life outside these lines you fail to move.'

However the last line of this stanza did feel a little clunky and I wonder if you would consider:

'but in life outside these lines, you fail to move.'

Magic xxx

Yes, that's better, thank you so much!

J x

No problem. Criticism isn't one of my strongest literary skills, so I'm glad I could help ;)

Magic xxx

So sad it made my skin tingle. Lovely work J.

Lovely poem, I especially like

"Perhaps it’s your destiny to be confined
in ink, or bound with pixilated shapes;
I confess romance was never my forte:
poetry has remained my saving grace."

A very many thanks for your lovely comments, folks.

A skin tingle, chooselife? Wow, great! See, I'm better in verse than person with that sort of thing ;P.

Yes, shoe, that's my favourite stanza too, glad you like it!

J x

Aha - a tightly constructed poem from you. These are not easy to do but I suspect that you have worked away at this one - it's very good indeed.

Hey Tony,

Yes, I wrote this a while ago but wasn't happy with it, so left it, and then I came across it again yesterday on my computer and worked on it until I was!

A great many thanks!

J x

This is marvellous. :-)

'I have not words enough to make you flesh;'

I think this is true for most of us. I could really relate to this beautiful poem and I thank you for posting it as it reminds that beauty is not in what we have in abundance, hence are able to share it- beauty is in our ability to share the things we don't have or possess very little of in the best way we can. That is why I feel this poem is truly beautiful.

Nathan x

Hi Jennifer,

I would have to concur with Shoe when it comes to my favourite stanza. I'm glad this is not listed as autobiographical, the thought of someone prefering solitude to imperfection is rather sad.

Kheldar :--)

New Jennifer,
Well deserved cherry!
Bit sad, for me is the same
stanza as Shoe;
Brill; how you made it all flow.
julie xx

Yes I agree with Nathan Bednarek and Kheldar! Well earnt cherry. The solitude is the sad part of this poem which is very good indeed. Thanks ;)

It's a rather poignant echo of those old poets who addressed their muse before kicking off (in the days when you could go on for pages and pages and people would still read it). It's strange and somehow comforting how these things become real in a way. Very good.

Rob

Thank you so much for all your lovely comments on this, folks. I've not been checking in enough!

J x