Touch me

I really liked this poem, the language was very effective and the start and ending worked together well.

I liked this too, but I did wonder whether the repetition of blood worked since it didn't seem to be for emphasis (unless I'm mistaken?) and one word that stood out was 'boring'...I'm not sure it works poetically in this context? But that may be just me. I particularly liked the rhythm of the repeated first and last lines.

This poem made me want to dance out the words. Great.

Thanks, LawofTheOne, glad you liked the circular aspect!

Ahh, Doeslittle, I seemed to have mislaid my words at that point - can you suggest another for 'boring' to be substitued with?

And completely overlooked blood being used twice - perhaps 'veins' or 'cells' or 'pores'? Suggestions welcome!

Thank you, HaiAnh, yes, I hoped it was rhythmical for once after my usual disorganised free verse!

Very sensual poem.
The following lines:

Touch me
Watch me
Talk me out of it
Take me
Want me
Get on with it

well illustrate the dilemma between yielding to a throbbing passion and resisting temptation (Talk me out of it) but it seems that giving in is the preferred course of action.

Very enjoyable.

You know what might be an idea is that instead of replacing 'boring' is to cut that whole line...I really, really liked this, but those fifth lines in each stanza seemed out of place...intelligent, professional etc. Yes, I would cut the fifth line in each stanza. You would also cut the repetition of lack of intention with 'unintentional' that way too. Like veins instead of second blood.
Having said that, what do I know...it was cherry picked for good reason.

I don't know much about poetry but I know what I like, and I liked this ... so thanks for sharing.