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Battle for sun love

Posted by Kahdai on September 28, 2010 - 10:33

I
will know
you're my one
& come to you
when we've won
only then can I
tell you the one
to make into love
and when we're done
lying under new sky
to watch rise of sun.

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MistakenMagic | September 28, 2010 - 19:37

Short and simple - but very beautiful, Kahdai. Just a couple of typos I spotted - 'your' should be 'you're' and 'were' should be 'we're'.

Magic xxx

Kahdai | September 29, 2010 - 19:07

thanks very Magic! (agen ;) ) K xxx

Kahdai | September 29, 2010 - 19:11

Also think line 8 makes it PG lol...