Pacing past the window,
knowing you are out there
I wonder if you have forgotten me.
Am I somewhere in your conscience?
or just here looking at
all your pictures of her?
Whenever I am not there
I see you are on your phone.
You say you are just friends
& I dare not doubt you,
I know I would fall apart.
Holding it all in me
almost afraid to hold you
for further breaking
my heart.
Comments
MistakenMagic | March 29, 2010 - 10:00
I'm really glad you decided to post this one, Kahdai! I love its brutal honesty and as a reader you can really feel the narrator's pain. Well done on this beautiful poem ;)
Magic xxx
Silver Spun Sand | March 29, 2010 - 17:00
Hi there, Kahdai. I enjoyed this...just a couple of minor points. End of line 4, do you mean 'consciousness'? And Line 9 - should be 'friends'.
As Magic says, this a beautiful poem. Well done;-)
Tina xx
Kahdai | March 30, 2010 - 10:31
Magic, don't feel pain it's all ok now & thanks for helping me ;) . Tina, I meant conscience thanks, good I wouldn't have looked it up, all spell check kept saying confidence! Real people are much better understanding me. Thankyou both glad you like it. xxx