magic shop

What a strange little town we have parked up in,
I wonder if I could have travelled back in time,
the narrow lanes and old market place centre,
surrounded by old rooftops in a wavering line
bumpy round stones shining under our feet,
cats around every corner to meet and greet,
just as odd people walking up the street.

Through the cloaks and hats and docile cats,
see a pair of glimmering blinking emerald eyes,
in a black fur coat with sunset highlight skies,
turning with another wink and a swish of a tail,
waiting to lead me down the alley cats trail,
you run, I crawl along walls between fences,
emerge into light as the guide dissapears.

A lonely little shop sunk in between the houses,
of an old fashioned residential village green,
many stainedglass windows shining either side,
then see magical wonders in the shop window,
daring myself to go on over and look inside,
not the fantasy ornaments or odd assortments
try to catch my eye and I see an old clock.

Stood in a corner is a clock like a puppet stage,
painted half blue and half starry midnight sky,
with a sun in the middle surrounding a moon,
as over their face, numbered planets fly,
numbers nothing like the roman lines,
so I couldn't even work out the time,
and the noise that it made sent me to sleep.
* * * * * * *
When you have only small windows, daylight out,
birds can fly past & find you in sudden darkness,
the flickering light and sounds of frantic wings,
woke me up the sun was glaring straight at me, through a window with a stained glass sunset,
it lined up almost perfectly onto a cuboard,
the orange glass sun on its doors glowing.

Curiosity, made me follow a cat to an empty shop,
full of eccentric antique storage of all sorts,
curiosoty had allowed me to pick up a stray dog
who I had told to take care when we arrived here
who had now managed to find his way to me again,
who somehow had got into mysterious this shop &
was pulling at a golden knocker on the cupboard

It was the right height for this huge brown dog,
who was

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Comments

Silver Spun Sand | October 8, 2011 - 08:09

Hi there, Kahdai;-)

I must say I am rather 'bowled over' by this one. Your writing has come on in leaps and bounds and I am very impressed. Just a minor point...in the second line I think you have missed out a 'we'. Ie. 'I wonder if we could have travelled back in time'.

Those old grandfather clocks were splendid,especially the 'moon-phase ones which you describe so well in the last stanza.

I also admire your choice and use of vocabulary to create atmosphere, as you do so well in stanza 2:-

"Through the cloaks and hats and docile cats,
see a pair of glimmering blinking emerald eyes,
in a black fur coat with sunset highlight skies,
turning with another wink and a swish of a tail,
waiting to lead me down the alley cats trail,
you run, I crawl along walls between fences,
emerge into light as the guide dissapears."

Really enjoyed this, Kahdai, and a big 'well done';-)

Tina x

Kahdai | October 8, 2011 - 14:35

Thankyou so much Tina :) I didn't know it was a moon-phase one! It should be I because your supposed to be surprised later on, also changed your feet to our feet, now do I continue here or in a part 2? xx K

Silver Spun Sand | October 8, 2011 - 15:14

Hi there, Kahdai. Wasn't sure it if should have been a 'we or an 'I' but an 'I' works just fine;-)

As to part 2, I would say if it stands alone as a poem then post it separately, but if you need to read the stanzas you have previously written to be able to understand it, then I would go into 'edit' and add the additional stanzas on. It's up to you really;-)

Looking forward to reading it.

Tina xx

Kahdai | October 8, 2011 - 15:34

It is a story and it might prefer to be a long story
Well see how it goes :) thanks for help Tina x

Silver Spun Sand | October 8, 2011 - 15:36

You're more than welcome, k;-)

T x