Blue lines
I watching
by my self
feeling ok
You arrive
sensed you
realise me
loving you
White Rose
in my post
make me :)
was it you
Orange now
for middle
new fusion
loss of me
Dark Stain
through me
shows hurt
scars heal
Lightnings
show me up
in my dark
you see me
& remember
don forget
love me in
back again
Comments
kheldar | July 24, 2010 - 21:07
This, to me at least, is a great way of pacing a poem. Very unsual and very clever.
David xx
MistakenMagic | July 25, 2010 - 15:37
I agree with David - very clever and unusual structure, Kahdai. This one was worth the extra work ;)
Magic xxx
Kahdai | July 25, 2010 - 16:07
Yay :D thankyu both! I do many poems like this though, its how I think them in my head. I really like trying these I.P.s Kahdai xxx