The Never Ending. 1


from the ABC set THE NEVER ENDING

THE NEVER ENDING

TEN MINUTES AGO....

Suddenly, he woke up. It was the perfect time to scape. In a hurry, he put his clothes on and ran downstairs without thinking twice...
The telephone rang...Shit!...Who the hell could that be? he decide to answer... maybe it's Mabel....
But it wasn't Mabel. It was Growl...They were after him!...He opened the door with shaky hands and....

The frozen wind hurt his cheeks. He looked left to right...no one...he crossed the street and was swallowed by the darkest night ever...

NOW...

He hurriedly walks to the station. He would take the first train to...somewhere. It doesn't matter.He must leave, and it has to be now!...

He sits by the window. His reflection stares back at him, bewildered. He looks so haggard! Tiny wrinkles, like spiderwebs, invading his skin.

Basil steps off the train to a bright and windy morning. The small village station is empty but for a shadow that gives away the hiding spot of his enemy. He walks fast past the empty benches, and runs through the hall to the main avenue. He collides with a tall woman dressed in black.
'I'm so sorry!...Are you all right?' Basil grabs the arm of the woman and looks her in the eye. 'Yes, thank you!' She smiles.

They are sitting at a table in a dark corner of a bar. A tall man opens the door and peeps inside. Basil freezes. It's Growl !

'Amanda, you'll have to excuse me, but I'm getting out of here! 'What's wrong, Basil?' Basil looks from the shadowed corner, to the door...

To be continued.

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Comments

Frances Macaula... | September 30, 2009 - 12:17

Reminds me of a Japanese graphic novel - very visual.
:o))

Keiko Shizuru | September 30, 2009 - 12:34

Thank! It's written on twitter. 140 characters each day. An experiment. Let's see what happens. Cheers !
keiko

Frances Macaula... | September 30, 2009 - 12:53

That's probably why it reads like text from a graphic novel without the pictures...

tcook | September 30, 2009 - 14:35

I like it too - but you need to sort out your tenses - they leap from past to present and back again at will. I think it's very black and white horror film.

Keiko Shizuru | September 30, 2009 - 15:30

Hi! My idea is to write in present tense from the word 'now'. Where did I went back again to the past ? Please tell me ,because I can't see it. Thanks And thanks for reading
keiko

Larkin Williamson | October 31, 2009 - 12:53

This is cool...nice imaging! :)

Keiko Shizuru | October 31, 2009 - 13:06

Thanks larking ! Good 2 C U around !
keiko