From the Park Fountain

This is beautiful. The best I have ever read from you I think. A lovely poem. Thanks for commenting on mine - I could just repeat your comment back to you for this one. 'Parachute droplets', 'toy hands', 'sighs for home'..all great.

Wow, thanks, Doeslittle. I tried to change my style for this after reading an essay on Dylan Thomas, maybe it works for me.

This has some really lovely lines in it. I found the last 8 a little sad. Does the 'keeper' represent those adults who forget what its like to be a child? Is he a metaphor for forgotten youth? Am I reading far too much into this?

Very well done indeed this K, doeslittle's pick of the images are spot on... as is her assessment of this poem's place in your work.

There are always at least two poems on the page Dynamaso, the one the poet has written and the one(s) the reader(s) read. That's what I like about poetry, myself.

Regards
Ewan

I like that idea - that there are two poems on the page.

Thanks, Dynamaso. I tried to make the last 8/9 lines different by lowering the syllable count- guess it worked! And no, you're not reading too much into it, in fact keep going further!
Thanks, Ewan. Glad you liked it. In my more cynical moments I think the open-interpretation can devalue poems, but I suppose ultimately if the readers thoughts can be provoked his/hers are of the same worth as the author's.

'I suppose ultimately if the readers thoughts can be provoked his/hers are of the same worth as the author's.'

Yes, exactly my point.

'There are always at least two poems on the page'

Well said, Ewan.

Keleph, it worked a treat. I hope I haven't devalued this piece with my questioning, though.

Not at all, Dynamaso. When reading a published poem there is usually a piece about the author and even the themes they tackle. On here, we sometimes need to ask questions.