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Spirit's kiss

Posted by keleph on May 29, 2008 - 21:31
from the ABC set Thoughts and Poems.

When late evening's breadth lays you in its wake
And sparkling summer stream stagnates in a lake,
silence, in a blanket roasts the air
thoughts, like paper, scratch and tear
My soul is stretched to breaking.
My madness is awak'ing
Like a cyclops, plodding, from a cave
Or Medusa screaming from her grave...
or a bad poem written upon a receipt
for last week's bread and tomorrow's meat.
At night, natural hands knock upon my door
While clouds toss and turn and drift no more,
toward sunsets, hopes and sweet embraces
My Guest is fair, with many faces,
She brings both love and death
I'll taste them both upon her breath

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jennifer | May 29, 2008 - 22:17

'thoughts, like paper, scratch and tear'

love this line!

keleph | May 29, 2008 - 23:16

Thanks Jennifer,
I wanted to be a bit looser with the metaphors and similes in this, going for nice, memorable lines.
glad you liked it, and thanks for the comment.

Doeslittle | May 29, 2008 - 23:23

I love 'silence, in a blanket roasts the air'. I read something very interesting in an essay by Borges today...he was talking about rhyme and that the reason he disliked it was that it tempted poets to write needless lines or use unsuitable words. I don't think you have here. Boredom is a good thing at times.

keleph | May 29, 2008 - 23:43

lol, this poem is written half way down an A4 page; the top half is random rhymes and metaphors wisely scribbled out. I hope I avoided that trap on the finished article :)
I've read Brodie's Report and The Aleph (keleph, get it?) but not his essays. Love his stories though. Can you really be bored when writing a poem? If not, is boredom impossible to capture in poetry?
Thanks for the comment, Doeslittle.

jennifer | May 30, 2008 - 00:05

I tried!

Organic Love machine | March 4, 2009 - 22:33

That poem is so close to being really really good.

'Can you really be bored when writing a poem? If not, is boredom impossible to capture in poetry?'
:D

well what is boredom? if it evokes emotion, it can be captured in a poem.