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60 - MIDNIGHT

Posted by kheldar on August 12, 2010 - 22:05
from the ABC set THE HUMAN CONDITION

Midnight. In the darkness a struck match flares, bright yellow against the black, quickly replaced by the orange glow of a freshly lit cigarette. Moments later the night-time silence is shattered by the staccato bark of a smoker’s cough. A door swings open, artificial light briefly illuminating a sign on the wall: “Fire Exit only, no access to Oncology Ward”.

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Comments

skinner_jennifer | August 13, 2010 - 08:22

Hi Kheldar,
Really like this, you definitely have a way with
words.
I love the way you express yourself.
Jenny.

skinner_jennifer | August 13, 2010 - 15:24

Hi Khldar,
I know exactly what you mean.
Jenny.

kheldar | August 13, 2010 - 17:14

Thank you Jenny. With a limit of 60 words every one has to count i guess.

David :--)

MistakenMagic | August 13, 2010 - 18:43

Really brilliant take on this week's IP, David! I especially liked: 'staccato bark of a smoker’s cough.' Well done!

Magic xxx

kheldar | August 13, 2010 - 19:24

Thanks Magic, it was certainly an interesting exercise to try and keep my ramblings to a minimun.

David xxx :--)

darkenwolf | August 13, 2010 - 20:45

brilliant; nothing more needs to be said does it?

Cavalcaderl | August 13, 2010 - 23:13

new Kheldar
Great take on (IP) 6o words.
Might try?? Later.
julie x

kheldar | August 14, 2010 - 00:06

Thanks Julie, I look forward to seeing your take too.

David xxx :--)

shoe | August 14, 2010 - 18:23

says a lot more than the words, your descriptive prose
comes to the fore brilliantly.

kheldar | August 14, 2010 - 19:00

Thank you so much for that Shirley :--) xxxx

Kahdai | September 6, 2010 - 21:48

In as simple an IP starting in mystery & flames in darkness, light in hope, ending with lung cancer. Amazes me what you can make with IPs! K ;)

kheldar | September 20, 2010 - 21:46

Thanks for that Kahdai, and apologies for the delay in responding.

David xx

Kahdai | September 23, 2010 - 12:52

no worries :)