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SHE TOOK THEN TO THE HILLS (I.P.)

Posted by kheldar on August 11, 2010 - 21:11
from the ABC set FANTASY

I came downstairs one morning
The doormat swathed in bills,
I paid them no attention
Too wrapped in my own ills.
There is a wooded valley
A secret place I know,
At times when I am troubled
It's here I'm apt to go.

The golden leaves of Autumn
Cloaked the ancient trees,
Some took flight but briefly
With each new breath of breeze.
Down amongst the undergrowth
Where nagging winds can't reach,
The piled discarded finery
Of Rowan, Birch and Beech.

Dappled rays of sunshine
Made puddles on the ground,
Amidst the rustling of the leaves
I heard the strangest sound.
It was no woodland creature
It was not mouse or bird,
The tiniest of voices
Open mouthed I heard.

"We see that you are troubled"
A voice spoke 'mongst the trees,
When I spied the speaker I
Fell speechless to my knees.
A tiny maid, six inches high
In Autumn's hues arrayed,
She looked at me and smiled
Bold and unafraid.

Appearing from the shadows
A dozen of her ilk,
Skin like Autumn sunshine
Hair like finest silk.
"We see that you are troubled"
The fair made spoke again,
"Walk with us a while
Let go the cares of men."

We wound our way in silence,
There was no need for speech,
Silent too our chaperones
The Rowan, Birch and Beech.
The leaf strewn ground before us
Began to gentle rise,
There upon the woodland's edge
The maid voiced her goodbyes.

"I see you're no more troubled"
I saw she spoke the truth,
The warmth I felt within me
The glowing, golden proof.
"We shall come again perchance
You're e'er beset by ills",
With that, with her companions,
She took then to the hills.
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COPYRIGHT DM PAMMENT 11th AUGUST 2010

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Comments

Hourhouse | August 12, 2010 - 07:58

No need for speech. Beautiful.

shoe | August 12, 2010 - 08:19

This is gorgeous, one of your very best, you might like this=
http://www.newfairytales.co.uk/pages/submissions.html

Shirley ;} xxx

skinner_jennifer | August 12, 2010 - 09:04

Hi Kheldar,
This poem is so magical, just the kind of poem I
love. Fairy tales and fantasy are my favourite
stories to read. You captured the magic so well.
Jenny.

MistakenMagic | August 12, 2010 - 09:26

This one has a lovely old-world feel to it, David. It all flows so well. I especially liked these lines:

'We wound our way in silence,
There was no need for speech,
Silent too our chaperones
The Rowan, Birch and Beech.'

Magic xxx

kheldar | August 12, 2010 - 18:09

Hourhouse, thank you so much for your kind comment. Using one of the lines from the poem makes it all the more special.

Kheldar :--)

kheldar | August 12, 2010 - 18:13

Thank you so much Shirley, I am so pleased that you ratr this one so highly. Thanks also for the link, I've had a look and I may consider making a submission.

David xxx :--)

kheldar | August 12, 2010 - 18:15

Hi Jenny,

That this appeals to you as a fan of fairy tales and fantasy makes your liking of it all the more gratifying.

Kheldar :--)

kheldar | August 12, 2010 - 18:18

Hi Rebecca,

I always get a special thrill when you comment on one of my poems. The fact a writer as good as yourself can find pleasure from my work is especially pleasing.

David xxx :--)

Hourhouse | August 12, 2010 - 18:56

If I'm honest, Kheldar, there was something about this poem moved me to tears. Thank you.

kheldar | August 12, 2010 - 21:24

Hi Julie,

Thanks as ever for reading, commenting and most of all enjoying.

David xxx :--)

Cavalcaderl | August 12, 2010 - 21:38

New Kheldar
hello! David good poem for the (IP)
As always to me your good poems.
I like all, but the stanza I like is:

"I see you're no more troubled"
I saw she spoke the truth,
The warmth I felt within me
The glowing golden proof.
"We shall come again perchance
You're e'er beset by ills",
With that, with her companions.
She too then to the hills.

Hope I have copied your punctuations right.
julie xx (:-

Silver Spun Sand | August 13, 2010 - 10:15

This is wonderful, David. It moved me too...greatly.

Tina;-)xxx

kheldar | August 13, 2010 - 13:33

Thank you Tina, it is nice to know my words can bring an emotional response.

David xxx :--)

Kahdai | September 6, 2010 - 21:44

This is lovely kheldar, IP for took to the hills made me think of tegfolk in them too, this is the kind of fantasy story I adore. K

kheldar | September 20, 2010 - 21:48

Thank you Kahdai, your comment means so very much to me.

David xx

Kahdai | September 23, 2010 - 12:53

Well thankyou too! K xx