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WEARINESS

Posted by kheldar on February 12, 2010 - 15:49
from the ABC set THE INNER CONDITION

Weariness
Bone aching, strength sapping weariness.

Weariness like climbing an endless mountain
Weariness like wading through a boundless swamp
Weariness like cutting down trees in an infinite forest
Weariness like reading a thousand Austen novels
Weariness like watching ten score political broadcasts
Weariness like a debilitating disease.

The mountain is in his head
The swamp is in his heart
The forest surrounds his soul
He doesn't read Austen
He won't watch politicians
He has no pyhsical illness.

The weariness remains.

COPYRIGHT D M PAMMENT 12th FEBRUARY 2010

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Comments

shoe | February 13, 2010 - 11:29

A very effective structure and I really like the limited punctuation, the statments of fact( rather than emotional respones) are quite hard hitting, brutal almost. I would pray these feelings pass soonest, xx

kheldar | February 13, 2010 - 12:48

Thank you Shirley xx :--)

MistakenMagic | February 13, 2010 - 13:10

I agree with Shirley - great structure, love the way it's split into two halves, and *sigh* this poem is how I feel! Thank God it's now half term for me ;) Well done on this one, David!

Magic xxx

kheldar | February 13, 2010 - 13:23

Thank you Rebecca, your comments, and indeed praise, always give me a fillip. Sorry to hear that you can relate to it, hope half term does you good.

David xx :--)

Cavalcaderl | February 13, 2010 - 15:31

new kheldar
Very well described 1000's
like this,I know and can identify
with most words a cat has nine lives.
Yep! well done David!
julie x

kheldar | February 13, 2010 - 16:42

Thanks julie xx

Silver Spun Sand | February 13, 2010 - 17:22

Tremendously effective, this one, David. It had a great impact on me, which is indeed how it is intended to make one feel. Think I'll go and have a lie down in a darkened room, as they say;-)

Joking aside, I can only echo Shirley's words and hope the feeling soon passes.

Tina x

kheldar | February 13, 2010 - 17:38

Thanks Tina, for both the comment and the care.

David xx :--)