Don't it make my brown eyes blue


from the ABC set Lacework

We'd always joked about my height,
how soon you would outstrip me,
a centimetre more this summer,
laughed that I was shrinking,
that's what nannas do.

Today, I smoothed your shoulders,
twitched fluff and feather from lapel,
straightened your tie, checked parting.

Today you stood tall, hands raised high,
to reach and grip an oaken casket,
bore grief and name with his sons.

Today you towered, as he would expect,
Manhood, in your last goodbye.

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Comments

celticman | September 4, 2010 - 18:40

a fine wine of a poem.

insertponceyfre... | September 4, 2010 - 18:49

that's beautiful Lena

lenchenelf | September 4, 2010 - 19:27

Thank you both, very much appreciated. All the best, Lena xx

jennifer | September 4, 2010 - 21:47

Powerful stuff, well executed!

(just a note - plurals are never indicated with apostrophes, you've got one on 'nanna's')

J x

RachelPatricia | September 4, 2010 - 23:16

Simply beautiful, well put :)

lenchenelf | September 5, 2010 - 12:59

Thank you Jenn and PPDreams. Punctation noted. atb Lenax