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Posted by lenchenelf on August 30, 2010 - 21:44
from the ABC set Walled Garden

There is something sad, almost lascivious,
in the way a Lily offers her summer ruin.
Fragile pink lips curl back, proffer of stamens
heavy in pollen, before her petals drop.

Admirable admiral, you pay a courtesy visit,
last cluster of florets, galaxy bunched
on the Buddleia, your universe, for today.

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minor edit 31.08.10

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Comments

littleditty | August 31, 2010 - 10:40

'your universe for today.' great endline, mature poem :) liked a lot x

staticshakedown | August 31, 2010 - 10:45

This is great.

lenchenelf | August 31, 2010 - 13:29

Thank you Little D and S Sdown, pleased you liked it.
atb Lena xx

maggyvaneijk | August 31, 2010 - 14:24

this is beautiful, such delicate imagery.

lenchenelf | August 31, 2010 - 16:43

Thank you Maggy :-) atb lena xx

Highhat | August 31, 2010 - 18:09

I liked it too ;)lovely

lenchenelf | August 31, 2010 - 19:33

Thanks High Hat :-) atb Lena xx

rjnewlyn | August 31, 2010 - 22:58

A nice update on Blake's 'To see the world in a grain of sand and heaven in a wild flower'. Captures an enormous amount in very few words. Well done! Rob

lenchenelf | September 1, 2010 - 20:29

Thanks Rob, appreciated atb lena xx