Another Chardonnay


from the ABC set Paseo Maritimo

And you – my passion – breeze through
These orange curtains like you own the place,
Pad along the cool ceramic floor with fiery strides
To the bar, heating the marble, raiding cupboards,
Growling; and I’m here watching you pace;
Find the bottle, put it to your lips, and drink
Like it’s a long cold winter’s night,
Wipe your mouth, sigh through your teeth,
While here I am, smiling – fisherman’s trousers tied
Around my hips, sun blazing down on the sarong,
Skin listening to those warm sea breezes,
Listening - to a lusty blond called Chardonnay
Tell me my troubles over the rim of her glass eye.
You take another swig; slam the bottle on the bar,
Yawn, stretch like a bear, step onto the porch,
I hear you say - What a perfect name…
Strike a match on the doorframe,
Light a cigar; pick Tequila from the larder…
Chardonnay wants another spiked Pina Colada –
What a perfect name…“And you?”
I reach for the bottle, put it to my lips, and drink
Like it’s a long cold winter’s night, “Whatever
You’re having, Babe - I’ll have the same…”

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Comments

QueenElf | February 22, 2008 - 01:06

Nice to see you back again and on top form.
LisaX

Ewan | February 22, 2008 - 06:29

This took me somewhere... tropical? Warm at least.

Loved this:
'Pad along the cool ceramic floor with fiery strides
To the bar, heating the marble, raiding cupboards,'

I think it gets over a certain animal magnetism ??

Oh and the drink motif was slick. Cheers.

Ewan

littleditty | February 23, 2008 - 08:39

Thank you both - sub tropical, bit chilly actually -need a cardi... :)

and the cherry has made me feel all fruity - thanks cherry person -made my day xx

Lorraine_Mace | February 23, 2008 - 12:01

Really enjoyed this - took me on a trip (and out for a drink).
Lorraine

www.lorrainemace.com

QueenElf | February 28, 2008 - 22:15

Congrats.I knew this was a winner.

Ssor | March 2, 2008 - 22:26

Wonderful extended metaphor wrapped in a dialogue. Dominique thinks it's "a beautiful piece" as well.

littleditty | March 9, 2008 - 19:59

really? i wish we had comment notification - thanks Ross, and Dominique, and Lisa and Lorraine, for commenting -cheers :o)