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Posted by Louise178 on November 26, 2010 - 19:44
from the ABC set Poems

The fire is dead
there is no coal
the electric heater
sits off in the corner
air hangs cold
listless misty breath
chills sallow face
of hands stuck in gloves
with body wrapped
in old dressing gown
over knitted jumper.

The milk is dead
it went off days ago
freezing outside
paths are ice
the body it sits
it contemplates
hurting aching
stiff with pain
the light goes off
but no one comes
the door is closed.

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Comments

insertponceyfre... | November 26, 2010 - 22:22

this is so bleak and sad

Louise178 | November 27, 2010 - 08:03

Dear ABC thank you for my cherry. The phrase 'heat or eat' inspired me, I obviously thinks it's wrong old people should have to choose, so have joined a charity and am going to see if I can raise a little money myself even if it's only selling a book of raffle tickets :)

Luly Whisper | November 27, 2010 - 17:26

This is vivid.

SundaysChild | November 27, 2010 - 19:52

Very thought provoking.

Louise178 | November 27, 2010 - 20:00

Thank you :)

fatboy74 | November 28, 2010 - 03:45

Well done Louise bleak but very good. Worthy cause also. :-)

Louise178 | November 28, 2010 - 11:42

Thanks fatboy:)