Driftwood


from the ABC set Poems

Rough, rugged driftwood
covered with grit and slime,
pierce not my soft white skin
with splintered fingers drawn,
as I reach with gentle hands
to place against my castle wall,
for you are real,
the precise material,
to bring alive
my splendid castle,
a gateway, for the crabs
the tiny fish,
my prize treasure
the envy of all the other kids,
who gape in awe,
at my castle
with it's proper
wooden drawbridge.

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Comments

Hourhouse | August 6, 2010 - 21:24

I liked this - I found a tension as I read, trying to make out where it was going, perhaps an enchanted castle or a wooden talisman. My mind was spinning and the ending was quite a relief! Nice one :o)

Louise178 | August 7, 2010 - 05:12

Thank you Hourhouse :)

Kahdai | August 9, 2010 - 18:02

wow this is lovely, imagination and detial Louise!

Louise178 | August 15, 2010 - 09:50

Thank you Kahdai for your positive and encouraging comment.