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Posted by Louise178 on September 28, 2010 - 09:57
from the ABC set Poems

This is a tale of Janet and John, no not really, it's Jackie's life, don't look, it's a story, it's a book pure fiction that lays in the reality of other people's lives, laid bare for all to see, words out of dark cupboards, as hurt stares out at you from every page, telling you of their childhood, filled with sexual abuse, physical emotional, a history of woe, childhood days, miserable days. Now later still there is drug abuse, alcohol, all neatly printed in rhyming stanzas, or haphazardly typed full of emotion pouring out, a self indulging waterfall, for all to see. Is this the time or the place, should there be a couch on this site, for people to lay on and for us to feed them cherries while they find comfort in the release of their poems their stories. ABC sounds fun, all about writing, reading, perhaps it should be renamed, OW that hurt, a television series like Oprah winfrey, but you know I jest, it's a free country, surely poems should be free spirited and come from within, perhaps there should be a section for us normal people, and another for the poor damaged sods. Anyway hang on you know I can't keep up slow down, I am heading for the normal section, hold open that door, I have no hands when I use my crutches!

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tinkerbell9 | September 28, 2010 - 15:03

Ouch, a little harsh maybe?! I liked the ending though!!

Highhat | September 28, 2010 - 15:34

The poor damaged sods are us socially excluded- who can't spell, punctuate, lack language skills and writing ditto! But I don't think you meant it so harshly. Nobody's normal anyway ! I think you make amends with the concluding words- 'my crutches'- I really hope I haven't misunderstood? Probably have. I think there are many layers to your piece- that makes it sympathetical.

Louise178 | September 28, 2010 - 15:48

This is meant to be totally humorous, it really is, the whole piece is meant in jest, I am always laughing at myself, I am a little bit disabled and have probelms with my walking, that is the joke of the piece :) perhaps I have a weird sense of humour, sorry! Anyway Highhat you have the most brilliant imagination, you are a brilliant writer. x

skinner_jennifer | September 28, 2010 - 16:18

Hi Louise 178,
Just wanted to say I enjoyed reading this piece.
I think that writers, need to express themselves,
it can get very frustrating, it's good that we have
a place to write. You take care now.
Jenny xx

Louise178 | September 28, 2010 - 16:24

This was written totally in humour Jenny, but I suppose I have been impressed by people's honesty and so I suppose I was saying a little bit, this is who I am. But I must stress the whole thing really was meant to be funny, it was meant to make people laugh. x

insertponceyfre... | September 28, 2010 - 17:41

I really like it Louise! I even like the fact that it only has a few full stops, because that suits the story, but I do think you should change adhocly to ad hoc; eg: or typed ad hoc, full of...

Louise178 | September 28, 2010 - 18:27

Thank you for that insert, you are quite right it doesn't fit, I will change it to - typed ad hoc, I think, that suits it. Thank you :)

Highhat | September 28, 2010 - 18:40

I'm glad you put me straight on this one Louise178etc. That's what the title means- Irony. well done. I thought it was brilliant and suited it well almost being in one sentence- Thanks for the praise- I don't deserve it- blush.
pia ;)

Highhat | September 28, 2010 - 19:35

Congratulations on the cherry- well done ;)

Louise178 | September 28, 2010 - 19:49

Thank you Highhat x

Louise178 | September 29, 2010 - 07:49

Dear blighters rock, it certainly isn't just about you, it is a comical look at all of us, it is meant to make you laugh, I hope it did :) p.s. this is nothing to do with anything really, one of my favourite songs is by James, come sit down, the lyrics in that song are just so brilliant.

fatboy74 | September 29, 2010 - 08:46

Have now removed several poems from the site in fear of painful diatribe! Not really :-) My favourite James song is Jonny Yen - set himself on fire again! Congrats on Cherry (Please don't read any of my poems):-)

Louise178 | September 29, 2010 - 09:17

Don't be silly, I am going to read them all now! If you read my poem 'The Truth' I am actually burning my metal crutches, you see I love to wallow in self pity :) I am as daft as you lot :)

Oldwarrior | December 16, 2010 - 22:49

Love this.
Reminds me of that old saying,
Conform, go crazy, or become a writer!
LOL