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Something real not perfect

Posted by Louise178 on January 28, 2011 - 14:34
from the ABC set Poems

What are you looking for?
not mountains and fallingsunsets
risingmoons, sweet bunny rabbits
and floppyears
oldlove on a postcard
fake as a polystyrene cup
give me something
gritty, dirty I can lay
these hands on
workout, decipher fathom
gluesniffingly nice
razor sharp
real as the 70's
tanktops flares toffee apples
make me smile make me laugh
put me on a mountain
behind the rising sun
we'll watch the stars
falling down with the moon
but make me smile make me laugh
give me something you, give me
something real that will last.

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Comments

insertponceyfre... | January 28, 2011 - 18:20

brilliant. even the tanktops

Highhat | January 28, 2011 - 18:34

I agree with Insert
;)Pia

Louise178 | January 28, 2011 - 19:02

Thanks guys, it was such brilliant fun to write that I don't really deserve a cherry aswell. But thanks anyway :)

sonora | January 28, 2011 - 19:32

'give me something gritty, dirty I can lay these hands on' - oh yes :o)

Good stuff.

Cavalcaderl | January 28, 2011 - 20:12

new louise178
Hi! liked all of this.
Umm I can identify many words
of yours in this lovely poem.
Takes one back doesn't it.Do you
remember the winky dolls, and the
Ra! Ra! skirts our daughter had them then.
Great time, flower power to.
A good poem.Thanks.
"Make me smile
make me laugh".
certainly did.
julie x

seashore | January 28, 2011 - 21:16

I love your writng. This is great.

Louise178 | January 29, 2011 - 08:05

Thanks seashore, you are kind :)