Summer vest denim shorts
pink espadrilles my life
is summer in your eyes
hot tanned skin alive
in an August breeze
along the shores
of pretty shuttered
stone buildings and
well trodden steps
excitedly you shout
you call my name
but you will never
catch me, I am
a glossy picture
on the kitchen wall
a favourite daydream
that is all, a memory
for you to recall....
of summer, somewhere.
Comments
Highhat | October 12, 2010 - 09:26
A well captured atmosphere. Lovely
;)pia
_lynze_ | October 12, 2010 - 11:11
The imagery here is nice, its not very specific, which i'm sure was the aim, but it certainly creates that tangible(?) memory/daydream of summer. Beautiful :)
skinner_jennifer | October 12, 2010 - 11:22
This was so beautiful, I really thought you were
there, to begin with. You certainly captured the
essence.
Jenny.
Louise178 | October 12, 2010 - 11:40
Thank you, Highhat, lynze and Jennifer for your comments, I expect it's where I would like to be given the chance, I thought it was nice and summery to cheer us up, it's from a picture I have on my wall, I won't tell you where! :)
Highhat | October 12, 2010 - 11:50
Well it did cheer me up- with the tan and the espadrilles and the worn steps was a really good line
;)pia
ps I had bet you would like to spell summer in the first lines. Sorry
I am guessing that we may be in Spain? Just a guess here in Autumn. ha ha
Louise178 | October 12, 2010 - 12:38
Thank you P, oops so many summers! No actually we are in my kitchen, no seriously, it is a Greek Island somewhere...x
Highhat | October 12, 2010 - 13:09
well near by- its mediterranean anyway isn't it!! Ah the mediterranean kitchen hmm- just for fun- !!...x
the parkster | October 13, 2010 - 07:22
Very god, i'm liking the memory feel to this piece. Its vague at the right parts but creates brilliant imagery at others, truly enforcing the feel of a flashback/daydream. Really good :D
Louise178 | October 13, 2010 - 07:55
Thanks parkster, a really cool comment! :)