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A Thousand Lines

Posted by Louise178 on October 11, 2010 - 13:42
from the ABC set Poems

Take a thousand lines
we've danced and rhymed
looked backwards
raced forwards
cleansed our souls
with descriptive words
and what is left...
a blank colourless page
the paints are cracked
they are dry
brushes stiffened
defiant, stuck in the air
on the windowsill
in an old jam jar

Take a thousand lines
this is me, this is you
blue skies, tall trees
sad times, happy bliss
and what is left...
a book full of life
a river running
flowing imagery
to be forgotten
misplaced, discarded
a hundred old
summer leaves
left wet and soggy
from autumn rain

Take a thousand lines
and let's move on...

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Comments

Highhat | October 11, 2010 - 14:33

This is very beautiful. There are several lines that are my favourites- well the whole poem comes together with all the lines. "Take a thousand lines, this is me this is you. . ." a special one and "summer leaves, left wet and soggy. . " what a perfect image
well done
;)pia

Louise178 | October 11, 2010 - 14:56

Thank you my friend Pia :)

Louise178 | October 11, 2010 - 15:09

Thank you to the ABC executives in high places for my cherry, much appreciated :)

Highhat | October 11, 2010 - 16:06

Fantastic- well done on the cherry ;)pia

shoe | October 11, 2010 - 17:06

Really liked this, too many lovely images to choose a favourite but I do really like the defiant brushes. well deserved cherry.

Louise178 | October 11, 2010 - 17:34

Thank you shoe :)

RachelPatricia | October 11, 2010 - 21:27

This is gorgeous, Louise. As has been said, too many brilliant lines to single out a favourite - well done on the cherry. Going to read this again now :)

Rachel xx

fatboy74 | October 11, 2010 - 21:48

fab louise - congrats on cherry. one of my fav writers on here. :-)

Louise178 | October 12, 2010 - 07:59

Thank you fatboy you are one of my fav writers too and thank you p&pdreams whose writing I also like :) there are some super writers on here, lots of different styles, I expect my style is simple, but hey that's me! :)