We are drawn to each other
our wounds are magnetic
our wrists together
form train tracks to
your bedroom
where I undress you
like a nurse. Each item
of clothing is a bandage
to unravel. The darkness swallows
our exposed parts. Our beating hearts
remain sealed in a catatonic
state, a tupperware to be shelved
for a later date
for never.
When I hear the noises you make
with others, I wish I could be
that brave although I can’t figure
out if you’re having an orgasm
or crying over something
they said.
I once told you, you were lucky
to have many eyes adore your flesh
you tried to make it better
by saying: “It’s all meaningless”.
Then you shook my Disney Souvenir:
“See how fast the glitter falls?”
I could have said several
things in reply but struggled
to shape the right sounds
Caught on my own breath
like a story, trapped in the
middle of itself.
Comments
MistakenMagic | January 8, 2012 - 16:44
"We are drawn to each other
our wounds are magnetic
our wrists together
form train tracks to
your bedroom"
- what a brilliant opening, Maggy! There are so many beautiful images in this - especially in the second and final stanza. Great to read something new from you!
Magic xxx
maggyvaneijk | January 8, 2012 - 16:46
Thanks for your kind comment, as always! I've been missing out on ABC Tales due to Christmas and work, cannot wait to catch up on your uploads!
celticman | January 8, 2012 - 17:25
I like your ending. I like your begining. I like your poetry, but not sure about fourth stanza. Then again my knowledge of poetry is, well, if the word below sublime is ridiculous, I'm one under that.
maggyvaneijk | January 8, 2012 - 17:27
Thanks Celtic, I see what you mean it is quite incoherent. I think this piece has just been swimming round my laptop for too long so I thought I'd upload it.
scratch | January 8, 2012 - 18:49
Super again Maggy.
ScoZen | January 8, 2012 - 19:50
Great stuff MV.
I am quite envious with the ease your write.
A well deserved cherry.
Beeme | January 8, 2012 - 20:13
I thought this was heart-breaking and beautiful at the same time. Wonderful as always Maggy, but sad, I hope your ok- if this is autobiographical xxx
blighters rock | January 8, 2012 - 21:05
Stripping bare the body of the loved, one will always find fault, usually in our own perceived inadequacy.
Acceptance of unrequited love is hard enough, but to put it into words so forgivingly is at the centre of life's art. Love is seldom even.
'See how fast the glitter falls' reminded me of 'The Bad and The Beautiful', one of my fave films (50's Hollywood, when cinema got the best out of its screenwriters).
maggyvaneijk | January 9, 2012 - 12:02
Thanks for your comments everyone. No need to worry Beeme, my work is rarely purely autobiographical. And I'm going to get a copy of The Bad and The Beautiful Richard!
hudsonmoon | January 9, 2012 - 14:42
Always a pleasure to stop by. I always know I'll be in for some delicious word play and imagery. Wonderful.
Rich
Cavalcaderl | January 9, 2012 - 15:18
new maggyvaneijk
Hello! Happy new year or better!
Enjoyed this poem and a story in it I think!
But exactly agree with hudsonmoon.
Delicious words and imagery!
like the title says a lot
Ah! a cherry! good.
Take care of yourself.
Good see your back writing.
Don't over do things?
julie xx
fatboy74 | January 9, 2012 - 23:39
This took me a few reads, but my slowing brain eventually caught up with this poem - really good Maggie and the ending is wonderful. :-)
Steve | January 20, 2012 - 01:10
It's really a very superb poem. I like the way you subvert the imagery. That line about being like "tupperware" being shelved for a date that never comes is so ironical twisted. It's very ingenious.
Is the narrator trying to heal the person?
Does the narrator love the person?
The poem sounds very anti-romantic at times like Eliot's Prufrock:
"Let us go then you and I
when the evening is spread out like the sky
like a patient etherized upon a table."
and also very delicate and understanding.
samhennig | January 24, 2012 - 13:19
This is a fantastic poem Maggy
skinner_jennifer | April 12, 2012 - 11:52
Hi Maggy,
just read this piece of writing and loved the
scene you created.
Great stuff.
Jenny.