Block

Some good imagery, here, Magic. Particularly like:-

'This is a ghetto of my making
and my hands have been crippled

by the frost...

I think you seemed to have unblocked your block, admirably;-)

Tina xxx

Thank you, Tina! Glad you like those lines ;)

Magic xxx

Brilliant imagery in my humble opinion. Another great poem. I think you just invented a way of overcoming the writer's block- write about the block itself and it could even spark some other ideas to write about. If you don't mind, I'll copycat your sly technique ;-p

Much enjoyed. Well done.

Nathan.

I don't mind at all, Nathan! Steal away ;) Really glad you like this one!

Magic xxx

love this - can relate. (Its perhaps just a personal thing that i dont like similes much, so would snip the 'likes'- or maybe just one of them before 'anger'. It's a wonderful middle section to this piece -ace. Also, is there another word to replace 'spread' which goes better with the smoke idea? And what about the tense there? Just thoughts, I'll go now :Oo
lol. enjoyed!

My tongue fell hardest of all.
This muteness filters inwards, anger

in smoke to riot the lungs.
But I see you peering at me

over my tall walls. Liberator.
And there is hope.

Hey ld - agree with you about the similes and will change accordingly, but I'm a little more reluctant to let go of 'spreads' - I just like the assonance with 'inwards' and the alliteration with 'smoke'. I'll have a think about another word! I really appreciate your feedback ld so don't ever be afraid to let me know your suggestions ;)

Magic xxx

Edit: I wonder if you think 'seeps' would work well instead of 'spreads'?

I really enjoyed this Magic, my favourite lines are;

'My tongue fell hardest of all.
This muteness spreads inwards, anger

in smoke to riot the lungs.'

Adore the smoke imagery and the last lines are perfect for me.

Beeme xx

Thank you Beeme! Glad you love that image. Yes, I think most writers can relate to the idea of a block - so I encourage you all the embrace the irony and write about writer's block ;)

Magic xxx

Hi Magic,

I too was going to write a poem about writers block, but it just wouldn't come.

seroiusly though, great poem.

david xx

Glad you think so David ;) I think the next stage after failing to write about writer's block is just to keep writing random words until something comes!

Magic xxx

This sounds a very bad case of block magic! Smoke in the lungs, mute-tongue & frost! I wouldn't believe that even you could get such lost in & I wouldn't like to be in there, unless to pull you out! I will try to explain my own brain-buffer moments. A new inspiration we can all write about. So helpful, thank-you! Kxx

Glad this was helpful, Kahdai! But don't worry - I think I'm out of my 'block' now, it was just a case of finding the time and motivation to write ;)

Magic xxx

Yes, making one, helped me finish another! I even made a space for the links & now I can relax. K :D

This is a quality poem, very well crafted, don't have a favourite bit as it works so well as a whole,
what a way to break a block!

Thank you, Shirley! Glad you think so ;)

Magic xxx

Wonderful. God I love your poetry. x

new MistakenMagic
I enjoyed all of it,
well done!on the cherry!
Good piece,just looked up the word
liberator=well saviour me to everything.
I had break to on punctuation mind.block's if
to much work out.I agree with shoe to.
julie xx

Aww thanks SundaysChild! It's great to see you round here again and I love your poetry too ;)

Thank you Julie! Glad you enjoyed this one ;)

Magic xxx