Dark Orchid (A Poem for Baby P)

Hi there, I loved the first part of this poem upto the words dark orchid...then it seems to fall off a bit and and loss conciousness...personally and completely subjective i feel if it was reworked and added to it could have the makings of earning a cherry and stars besides....

An emotive write, Magic on an even more emotive and heartbreaking subject.

There are no words which could possibly convey what most of us feel. One instance maybe, where less is more.

A brave and moving poem.

Tina x

Yes a brave write, I've been following this horrific event unfolding. I could never have written so sensitively about it. I always fear too much could be OTT this is just right IMO Val x

Dear Magic,thanks for writing this,I had a bash but I am full of angst in mine and tried several times but couldn't really do it,and as Val said,It's a fearful subject to approach but this is beautiful,I wish we could all do something in memory of baby P.xx

Thank you so much for all your feedback everyone :) And us poets must use our power to comemorate Baby P, in anyway we can!

Magic xxx

Magic, excuse my ignorance i hadnt realised it was for baby p...an inexcusable oversite on my part.....it fits perfectly as to the sentiments which must have been in his mind..

brave attempt.....regards

Thank you for your comment pumadelta. I'm glad, once you realised the subject matter, that this poem spoke to you.

Magic xxx

Oh this is a powerful masterpiece! Such a horrible tale of abuse. I was really affected by this poem.
-is so sentimental-

Great write.. -thumbs up-

best regards,
yReNe