The Equinox Parade

"The daffodils ignore the rabble and criss-cross
of crocuses - easily excited, drunkards all!
They ruffle their buttered manes and trumpet
the arrival."

Now that's what I call poetry!

Love your line structure in this one, Magic. You have some wonderful imagery (not unusual for you;-) As a whole, it paints a colourful, animated picture of spring ... The last line, especially effective.

Tina xxx

'chariot swing' - should that be 'chariots swing' or 'chariot swings' or am I reading it wrong?

Love the imagery in this, esp:

'ruffle their buttered manes'

and

'Their tendrils trembling like ticker-tape.'

Spring! If only it wasn't freezing again this week, was getting used to the sun - even advanced as far as a strappy top on Sunday!

J x

Thank you so much Tina - colour was what I was aiming for ;)

Thanks for the comment Jen - hmmm 'Chariot swing' I think I was intending use chariot as an adjective but I see what you mean. Do you agree that 'Chariot's swing' works better?

Magic xxx

dang it! i wanted to be the first to comment, 'cuz tina and jennifer said what i would say...except for the "strappy top on sunday!"
this a fantastic addition to your very impressive portfolio.
"Each mauve petal folds into a balloon,
straining its stem-string, wishing to rise
into burning blue circles of sky; kites,
birds - love songs." --i love this, especially with "love songs" hanging on the end.

jason

If your spring is as good as you describe it here, then it must be a beautiful time of the year. Unfortunately, where I am, Autumn is upon us and old man Winter is not too far behind. I absolutely love the last two line. So evocative...

Thank you Jason and Dynamaso ;) Well spring WAS like this when I wrote the poem, the crocuses and daffodils were swarming my local park and there was glorious sunshine! Now - it appears to be raining! Which part of Australia do you live in Dynamaso? I've heard from my cousins in Melbourne that it's getting very dreary!

Magic xxx

Magic, I live in Sydney. It is still warm during the day but the evenings are getting a lot cooler, much to my chagrin. If I had my way, I'd be living in the tropics and avoiding winter altogether.

Ah, no actually I think 'chariot' works as an adjective here, yes, leave it!

J x

Thanks Jen, I'll leave it be :)

Dynamaso, I love Sydney - I stayed in a hotel on Darwin harbour the last time I was over. We went to Brisbane as well - I was frazzled from sun burn! Even if it is cooler a night time I'd still rather be in Sydney than Yorkshire ;)

Magic xxx

Lovely stuff Magic - as usual. Paints a beautiful picture and the imagery is fantastic.
Sleet showers here coming in off the Atlantic every few minutes; the dogs won't go out for pee ;)

Chris XX

Thank you Chris! I can't do with the weather here in West Yorkshire - one minute it's glorious sunshine the next we're getting drenched!

Magic xxx

Just popped back to say, congrats, Magic, on the well-deserved 'Poem of the Week' status for this little gem:-)

Tina xxx

Wow I'm jealous ;-p

You did it again, well done.

Nathan xox

Thank you Tina and Nathan! I'm actually really shocked but very flattered that this got poem of the week. I'll have to thank Ted Hughes and Ruth Fainlight for the inspiration - oh and my drummer who suggested the willow trees - named after his dead gerbil :)

Magic xxx

congrats on poem of the week. well deserved!!!

jason

Thank you Jason ;)

Magic xxx

I think the editors just look around frantically every week, to try and find something to beat your work for poem of the week; they have a tough job! Congrats and as usual well deserved. You are destined for great things Magic; a class above very good; more into the Brilliant category. Well done!

Chris XX

*blushes* Awww thank you so much Chris! Happy to know my work is appreciated :)

Magic xxx

Well done on poem of the week, very very good writing! Keep it up, target audience!!!!

J x

Thank you so much Jen ;)

Target Audience xxx

Just read this now. Stunning, Magic.

A VERY well written poem, Magic. Such imagery, a cluster of richness, tilling the soil of words, definitely magic. Richard LP

Hello Richard! I've only just noticed your comment, thank you so much for your feedback ;)

Magic xxx

Hello Magic, thank you. This is a great poem, and I have added it to my file for enjoying and studying for its content and style. My file includes poets from around the world, and yours is a gem. RLP