Our Love

brilliantly told, beautiful poem -well done magic xx

Thank you, ld! Glad you enjoyed ;)

Magic xxx

i concur...beautiful! the idea of lifting fingerprints in the forth stanza is fantastic.

jason

Cheers Jason! :) That image is one of my favourites too!

Magic xxx

I think this is stunning Magic! Beautiful imagery, I also love the fingerprinting image. I also really like the idea of the sunlight becoming a barrier! More than well done on this one :-)

Beeme xx

Thank you, Beeme! Glad you like those images :)

Magic xxx

Stunning! I love how you've used the simple objects in the room to say something deeper about their love. I particularly enjoyed:

I find myself touching things,
knowing your fingers have been there before;
try to lift their prints from paper, pens...
and rub them into my skin, let them sink in.

There's such a delicacy to your writing. It's a pleasure to read.

Thank you so much, Maggy, for such a lovely comment! I guess this poem was about a raw sort of love, I didn't want to overdo it with elaborate imagery - so I'm glad you think I've pulled it off ;)

Magic xxx

Their essence fills everything and each little object holds its own memory. Fantastic as always magic - sometimnes i think you read my mind.
;)

Ah, well writing about love is reading the minds of the masses, Bruce ;) Glad you like this one!

Magic xxx

This is wonderful, Magic, as most certainly, the cherry endorses;-)

I too love the way you have used the mundane, ordinary things in life to enhance your imagery.

Also the 'astronomy' reference works really well.

My favourite stanza, this one:-

"This, our celestial dance,
has become the familiar;
a perfect orbit, no clashes,
no more can be said about it."

Tina xxx

Thank you, Tina! I couldn't resist returning to astronomy imagery ;)

Magic xxx

Your celestial dances & orbits has become familiar to me too, Ii really like when you explain love this way Magic :) & understand the special kindof never touching love, xxxK

Very prettily done, you've maintained control over structure, tension and passion, while lending an element of the eternal or timelessness in your imagery :-) atb Lena xx

Thank you, Kahdai! :) Happy you can relate to this one!

Magic xxx

'timelessness' - I like that idea, Lena! Thanks for your comment :)

Magic xxx

Ofcourse, you always manage to make things sound like that Magic! Infinite & magical, thats one of the things Ii like best, as am in contented awe of infinity & magic! ;) K xxx

I concur about the astronomy - it works very well. The idea of separate orbits is a great image for love's confusion (and the idea of the collapsing sun that dream that never quite happens). Great stuff...

Rob

Thank you, Rob! Glad you liked that astronomy imagery as science has never been my strong point ;)

Magic xxx

All that can be said has been said, Rebecca. I can only add: 'Bravissima'.

Luigi xxx

Grazie mille, Luigi ;)

Magic xxx

"I find myself touching things,
knowing your fingers have been there before;
try to lift their prints from paper, pens...
and rub them into my skin, let them sink in.

And at night I dream. I dream
of a dismantling; a collapse of the sun
and her beams... that you will come to me,
carrying your touch - your fingertips

so heavy with it: all, and only, for me.
I wake with their weight on my lips,
the memory of the dream whispering:
"His kiss... his kiss... his kiss..."
Stunning lines and a stunning poem.
Another epic from the magic wand ;)
Well done!

Thank you, Vidit! Lovely to hear from you again ;)

Magic xxx

Read this in the magazine and thought it was wonderful, richly evocative description and beautifully told with real skill. Fab. :-)

Thank you for coming back to find this one, fatboy74! Really glad you enjoyed :)

Magic xxx

especially liked the last stanza..great job as usual.

cheers.

Thank you, Jose! :)

Magic xxx

Absolutely beautiful

xx :--)

One wonders what it is, “carrying your touch - your fingertips”. There is no substitute, what can it be? It can only be spiritual &&

sunbeams, maybe means the warm memories?

Beautifully written...to old guys, like me, it sounds vaguely familiar...but I'd have to go back a bit..;)

Chris XXXX