Paper, Scissors, Rock

That's a really strong though sad piece. Beautifully written as usual. Val x

Thank you Val! Glad you enjoyed ;)

Magic xxx

I love all of this Magic. Very strong and very beautiful! Perfect ending, I love your closing lines.

The imagery is great,
'drank
from the page as if it were a pond.
Words black as fish, freckles on my hand'

and

'You eat the air with snapping mouth,
want to cut my eyes right out!
Don’t like to feel them on you - do you?'

and the whole poem has good rythm, well done!

Beeme xx

Thank you Beeme! Think you've picked out my favourite lines too!

Magic xxx

Cheers Julie :) And well done again on the cherry!

Magic xxx

Gosh, I almost missed this one, dear Magic.

I seem to remember it from way back, but maybe it's a deja vu (sorry about the missing accent by the way).

Brilliant, as usual, and everyone had stolen my favourite lines...except to say, they are all inspired;-)

Tina xxx

Hello Tina! I promise you you're mind's not going - this was a failed competition entry a few months back! I couldn't post it on ABC until I found out the results of the competition - seen as I didn't get anything, here it is :)

Magic xxx

Well, Magic, I genuinely think this is one of your best, if not THE best (in my humble opinion ;-p).

‘like the poetry I revelled in, drank
from the page as if it were a pond.
Words black as fish, freckles on my hand.’

This is my favourite stanza and one of the best bits of poetry I have EVER read and not just on this website. I mean it.

The emotions are beautifully captured. As the reader I can definitely sense the anger in this piece, but as a person I don’t ‘buy it’. It seems the anger is fuelled more by desperate love than spite. It’s like the poem is trying to lie to itself, searching desperately for a way out of the place in its heart called Love.

‘Don’t like to feel them on you - do you?’

and

‘So here we are; the grand finale.’

are the lines that give it away for me. Here’s why...

The first one makes the character sound more obsessive than malicious. She is staring intently at him and the reason he doesn’t like it is that he can still see the emotion in her eyes that he doesn’t feel himself. That makes him uncomfortable. Perhaps, that is the motive for his actions. Interestingly, the poem never directly addresses HIS point of view.

However, the second bit I quoted tells me one thing- she, after all that happened, still loves him, even though she knows she can’t be with him anymore. ‘I react calmly.’ ...

... Love ‘bears all things, believes all things, hopes all things, endures all things’ (1 Corinthians 13:7). In this case, however, love is not hopeful, but blind. She believes that in some way he is still on the same page:

‘So here WE are; the grand finale.’

...but, this is just my interpretation of the poem ;-)

Well, after this brief comment, there is only one thing left to say- well done ;-p

Nathan xox

Wow Nathan! Thank you so much for such a detailed, insightful response :) Totally made my day! I'm really glad you took so much from it!

Magic xxx

Edit: Yay! My 50th cherry :P Thanks cherry fairies!

New MistakenMagic
Congrats; on 50th cherry
wow well done
julie x cavalcader (:-

Thank you Julie :)

Wow, still can't quite believe it! Well I won't make an oscars-style acceptance speech but thank you to everyone and anyone who has ever read and reviewed my work! It is greatly appreciated :P

Magic xxx

MistakenMagic
Verse;
You took me for a fool.
But I knew,
Finger hooks catch my glares
jaws come to strip and tear

With my page I smother her breath
and you rip me to shreds.
great drastic.
True to life's experiences.
Julie xx cavalcader (;-