With all this weight
on my shoulders
I can't stand up straight.
I am the room's fifth corner.
You stretch yourself along my back -
I am perpendicular.
You give me this right-angled form
and I am blinded by a hood of hair
as my eyes burn into the floor.
These heavy arms hang
like pendulums,
tiring of time's demands.
But I will shoulder your burden;
your woes as my own.
I will let my skin shrink under your words ...
Because, like you, we know I will never learn.
Comments
Curse of 222 | September 10, 2009 - 00:03
look! i'm the first to post!!! that never happens.
this is fantastic, as always. if anyone can tell me how to post a photo in the comment, i can give you a pineapple.
jason
MistakenMagic | September 10, 2009 - 08:36
Hey Jason! I'm really sorry I have no idea how to post photos in comment :( But thank you for the intention of the pineapple and the comments :P
Magic xxx
P.S Really, really chuffed that my hundreth poem got a cherry!
Curse of 222 | September 10, 2009 - 20:08
i take it "chuffed" is a good thing.
jason
Cavalcaderl | September 10, 2009 - 21:29
new Mistakenmagic
Well done on the deserved cherry!
Is it your 100th great.
I looked at photo were you relaxing
or trying to replenish the blood system
good flop and straighten.
Hope put comment right.
Ill never learn either if
I could be a scarecrow
keep mouth shut be better.
julie xx x cavalcader (:-
MistakenMagic | September 10, 2009 - 21:50
Haha yes 'chuffed' is good Jason, for us Yorkshire lot it means 'thrilled' or 'happy'!
Hey Julie, it's not me in the pic hehe I tuck it from someone else's profile on the website www.flickr.com! I wish I was that skinny ;)
Magic xxx
Curse of 222 | September 10, 2009 - 22:16
"chuffed" doesn't sound good to me...maybe it sounds better with a british accent.
jason
MistakenMagic | September 10, 2009 - 22:26
I've never thought about it that way before! But I promise you I am really elated/happy/content/thrilled that this poem got cherried!
Magic xxx
Silver Spun Sand | September 10, 2009 - 22:28
Well done, Magic. Another amazing piece. Where do they all come from? Maybe, don't answer that;-) Oh, to be young again;-)
Tina xxx
MistakenMagic | September 10, 2009 - 22:37
Thank you Tina! Not too young ;) I turn eighteen this October! Scary how much fuss people down my end are making over it :p
Magic xxx
Cavalcaderl | September 10, 2009 - 23:24
New Mistakenmagic eighteen wonderful age and memories!too I was so different then.
thanks awe you are naughty
I couldn't use mine on my blog;
for all poems set then cos;not
all mine either, and too many
may ask toys to be made!
he!he! but looks good for comp;
never went through and web; favouite one.
We used to say dead chuffed to.
julie xx hah! hah! I just wish he
be more compatible to me.Oh well nite
I'm go----ing----x
Curse of 222 | September 11, 2009 - 20:03
Poem of the week! are you chuffed? hahahahahehehaha...that's my evil take-over-the-world laugh.
jason
threeleafshamrock | September 12, 2009 - 10:57
Great piece Magic and well worthy of poem of the week, well done.
Chris XXXX
MistakenMagic | September 12, 2009 - 11:01
Thank you Chris! It's been an absolutely fabulous week for me and POW just topped it all off ;)
Magic xxx
Beeme | September 12, 2009 - 16:59
Hey Magic sorry I'm so late commenting,
this absoultly deserves to be the poem of the week!
I love the opening and closing lines.
You really are a brilliant writer, one of my favs of yours, I think! :)
Beeme xx
MistakenMagic | September 12, 2009 - 17:41
Hey Beeme! Thank you so much for your wonderful comment ;) You know part of this was inspired by your poem 'Desperate Romantic' and these lines:
'And even though I know better,
the novelty of a perfect ending
stirs emotion inside of this room.'
So I'm really glad you enjoyed!
Magic xxx
Beeme | September 12, 2009 - 19:42
aww it was inspired by my work, thats fab. You have done a great job here!
Nathan Bednarek | September 13, 2009 - 20:27
'I am the room's fifth corner.
You stretch yourself along my back -
I am perpendicular.'
This bit is great! The title really drew my attention ;-)
This poem works with the picture perfectly. I love the way you structured this poem; it works brilliantly with the meaning/message. Another wonderful read. Well done!
Nathan xox
MistakenMagic | September 13, 2009 - 20:31
Hey Nathan! Really glad you like the title - I had a few in mind so looks like I picked the right one ;) Thank you for your comments!
Magic xxx