Poet, Heal Thyself

give this poet a cherry! Aces - well done Magic, the ending reminds me how it's best to make and keep good memories, and have interesting photos to find etc - this is a very mature piece, well expressed and measured - i don't believe you are 17/18, nope, not for one moment! ok, for one moment: you are an exceptional poet for your age. Right. Moment over. You are an exceptional poet! Well done! xx:o)

Wow . . . ld, I'm speechless! Your comment brought tears to my eyes! I'm having a difficult time at the moment and my poetry is keeping me sane, and to get a review like that! Just wow :) Thank you so, so much!

Magic xxx

All I can say is ditto, ditto,and last but by no means least, ditto.

Well done, Magic. You are twinkling brightly tonight, and no mistake:-)

Tina xxx

'postage-stamped
to the afterlife.'

Wow! ;-p

Just Wow!

These lines are so dark that I quite literally feel like there is somebody else in my room after reading these. The last lines, however, are simply perfect. What a cherry-pick this would be! ;-)

Great work, well done.

Nathan.

Thank you so much Nathan! I hope I'm not giving you nightmares ;)

Magic xxx

Just to echo the words already spoken, exceptional piece for one so young. I wish I was half as good. A pleasure to read. Val x

Thank you Val :) I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Magic xxx

With commendations like that, who am I to deny you a cherry? I'd just like to add that I agree with the above statements - your maturity astounds me at times. I'd love to see some prose from you too...

Thank you so much Tony! That little bunch of cherries just made my day :) Gosh, it's a while since I've written prose. A year ago it was all I wrote, but the poetry seems to have taken over!

That ending really resonates MM, nice work.

Maybe this bit is a bit heavy handed? A bit ott, perhaps?:

"The grave is open
like my many wounds,
crying out for her."

I wonder if also deleting "Now look at us." would make it stronger? The contrast of them drinking together versus him being at her funeral is powerful enough without you pointing out the vast change.

Good stuff though, I look forward to reading more.

Just my two cents.

Hey chelseyflood, thanks for your review :) Although I understand where you are coming from and really appreciate your suggestions I hope you won't mind if I stick with the original, after receiving so many glowing reviews and a cherry I'm happy with the poem as it is. I hope that you don't think I'm throwing your comments back in your face, because I really do appreciate your feedback!

Magic xxx

Pure Magic!well done.xxx

I love it! I love it!

Thank you Lynne and miss khaye! I'm glad you like it :)

Magic xxx

I just want to reiterate everyone else... This is rich, mature and very well done indeed.

Thank you so much Dynamaso!

Magic xxx