Shadowless

lovely poem Magic - I like the way you play the three characters against each other, if you see what I mean

Thank you insert! I do know what you mean and I'm glad you think it's effective :)

Thank you cherry fairies!

Magic xxx

Well done on the cherry Magic, richly deserved as ever. I really enjoyed. I love this stanza;

"He knows I want to talk about you -
that I've been thinking about you the whole time.
He can sense your ghost
lying at my side in the grass."

I think you have used the brackets very effectively.
I also adore these images;

"Cigarette smoke on silk wallpaper"

"losing its colour – sun-starved – making our own mark."

"like a muse reclining, conscious of her curving dales."

I feel there is so much beauty in this one Magic and the narrator's 'voice' is very strong in my opinion which is compelling to read. This is one of my favourite's of yours. I think you should be very proud, you're an amazing poet.

Beeme xx

Thank you for such an indepth and praising comment, Beeme! I'm so glad you like this one as it took quite a lot of editing to get it right and it's about two people very close to my heart ;) Thanks again for being such a supportive, loyal reviewer!

Magic xxx

What a great job you have done on this one! I like your comparison with the line: "A pair of parallel lines". Never to intersect; I think you summed it up nicely. Excellent job and congrats on the cherries!

This poem is awesome. It brings old memories of woodland to the surface, and mixes it with the colours you provide, and the characters.

It's most definetly a compelling read, and a well-deserved Cherry, among your many :)
Your an excellent poet.

Liam ~

Thank you Tornado! Glad you liked this one - this is a very special poem for me so such positive feedback is really appreciated ;)

Magic xxx

Thanks Liam :) I'm glad you could take so much from the poem!

Oh and welcome to ABCtales!

Magic xxx

I know nothing about poetry but for me this reads more like a compelling little short story, with very effective imagery and leaving lots of details out to give the reader much to think about. A great read thank you!

Thank you o-bear! This is one of my more narrative poems so I see what you mean :) Glad you enjoyed the read!

Magic xxx

Thanks for the Welcome Magic, that's very kind of you :)
It's not as such what I can take from the poem, it's what your skill in writing had to give ;)

The ideals constructed by the poem were vivid and easily conjured in the imagination.
A skillful piece :P

Liam ~

Thanks again for such lovely feedback Liam! And I hope you enjoy your time here :)

Magic xxx

Much better than the way this is done in stories and films (getting through bereavement, letting go of ghosts etc) I think because of its focus on the small moment that says a lot more than a narrative can - allows the readers mind to stretch away into past and future and capture a much better story.

Or something like that (the point of poetry I suppose).

Rob

Thank you for your insight, Rob! I agree, and that's what I like about poetry - it's power to communicate something in a few stanzas when a novel might need a few hundred pages to do the same!

Magic xxx

The story told so short, of something to be from ancient campfire & woods, nettles, reclinig hills, to one day soon. As with ghosts & shadows, often the silences mean more. K xxx

Thank you for your thoughts kahdai, glad this one spoke to you, even if it was about silences ;)

Magic xxx

Powerful words, Magic. Really came alive in my head. Loved it. BTW I've sent you an email.

Mark

Thank you Mark - I'm glad this one came alive for you! I've just read your email and am now deciding on which piece I'm going to pick ;)

Magic xxx

It's all been said, Magic and I'm so sorry I got to the party late...again;-)

Speaking of which, I hope you have a ball tonight, quite literally.

Wonderful poem and many congrats on the more than deserved cherry.

Tina xxx

Thank you Tina! Always better late than never ;)

Magic xxx

Enjoyed this one immenseley.

David xx

Thank you, David! :)

Magic xxx

wow, another beautiful piece of work. It's hard to remember poetry is made up of words when I read yours because you paint the scene so well, the landscape just unfolds right in front of me.

Thank you, Maggy! Glad this one painted a picture for you ;)

Magic xxx

'We both fold ourselves out, flat on our backs –
a pair of parallel lines. We’re silent for a long time,
I can almost feel the grass beneath us losing
its colour – sun-starved – making our own mark.'

Just beautiful. Another amazing poem. I’ve been away for a long time, but it's good to come back to something like this. Well done.

Nathan x

Great to hear from you again Nathan! Glad you enjoyed this one ;) Thanks for the lovely comment!

Magic xxx

if i had a but a fraction of your talent i would be a great poet indeed - absolutely brilliant!

Wow! Thank you so much darkenwolf for such a lovely comment! Much appreciated ;)

Magic xxx

the truth costs nothing; i mean every word!
:)