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This is beautiful, Magic. The imagery is superb! A very emotive piece with a sad ending, I notice it falls under autobiography, which is such a shame!Nevertheless the picture perfect descriptions left me feeling as if I was in the car with you and your dad :)

Beeme xx

Aw, this is sad :( As Beeme said, beautiful imagery, lots of personification which sets the tone nicely. I like the last stanza, it's an unexpected response. Nice poem.

Hello Beeme and Girlbear! Thank you for your feed back ;) I should probably put an author's note somewhere to explain that a few months ago my parents had a divorce scare and my dad was hellbent on leaving but thankfully my parents talked things through and are still together! This poem is set in the difficult time before they sorted everything out.

Magic xxx

I'm happy to hear that Magic :) xx

What mkes this for me is the gentle, subtle, way your relationship is described through familiar acts and mutual understanding. Very Nice. Margot

Magic, well done on cherry! :) x

Wow a cherry! Thankyou Beeme and Margot!

Magic xxx

I think every child dreads the possibility of ever having a conversation like this with one of their parents. This is a wonderfully written poem. You managed to capture the 'moment' with such skill. The words of this poem suggest a certain kind of shyness and modesty. It’s as if they don't want to have anything to do with the topic, and yet, the words make this poem shout out loud.

As always you sprinkled you work with that Magic of yours ;-)

Well done.

Nathan.

Superb; back with a veritable bang! Brilliant, I didn't see the whole story until the last line - which was, no doubt, the intention. Beautifully executed, well done!

Chris XX

I agree with all that has been said, Magic. A poignant, touching story, skilfully told. Well done too, on the much deserved cherry:-)

Tina xxxx

Thank you so much Nathan, Chris and Tina! This poem is very close to my heart so I'm glad you all enjoyed reading it ;)

Magic xxx

Very well deserved cherry:)
sarah x

Thank you Sarah!

Magic xxx

Hello Julie! Thank you for your comments, yes Avondale Road is a real street in my neighbourhood - the scene described in the poem did actually happen.

Magic xxx

new mistakenmagic
thankyou answer yes I thought so too I can read some are mainly true happenings, especially Iv'e
been there in many. I asked about name of Street
as it's coincidence to! well youv'e had arough ride to.
bless you+
julie x Well deserved Cherry!

new Mistakenmagic
Well done and deserved
the Cherry sometimes people
in life I mean can't always
put down or talk of things
it is very hard for them. Or
when have friends it back fires!
if one says the wrong thing
where is Avondale Road ,street ,avenue you mentioned
is it made up name.Sometimes I know
these stories poems could be real!
my belated Mum took 33 years.and left.etc;
julie xx well done well earn't Cherry.

very emotive poem, tender poignant scene, draws more emotional memory from a reader who has experienced similar -well done Magic, super poetry :o)

Thank you ld! I'm glad this poem meant somethign to you ;)

Magic xxx