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Posted by MistakenMagic on April 2, 2009 - 11:10
from the ABC set Conversation With My Thirteen-Year-Old Self

I lay you down like a page,
warm beneath the sun
of a desk lamp.

Our bodies curve into vowels
and mouths shape
soft, exotic verbs.

These fingers are quills.

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Comments

threeleafshamrock | April 2, 2009 - 11:34

Brilliant! Class act!

Chris XX

MistakenMagic | April 2, 2009 - 15:15

Thank you Chris ;)

Magic xxx

Silver Spun Sand | April 2, 2009 - 17:18

This one did have 'cherry' written all over it, Magic. Well done!

You really did produce some little gems from this week's IP. I guess that just goes to show how useful this weekly brain-teaser is:-)

Tina xxx

Nathan Bednarek | April 2, 2009 - 22:07

I agree with Tina. A well deserved cherry. Good work, well done.

Nathan.

Curse of 222 | April 2, 2009 - 23:05

excellent work. congrats on the cherry.

jason

MistakenMagic | April 3, 2009 - 07:46

Thank you Tina, Nathan and Jason! I'm getting addicted to these little 30 word poems - I'll soon have an anthology ;)

Magic xxx

littleditty | April 3, 2009 - 14:45

love this one - great write Magical one! :)

MistakenMagic | April 3, 2009 - 15:14

Thanks LD! This IP has really got my creative juices flowing ;)

Magic xxx

jennifer | April 3, 2009 - 17:20

I think it really cuts us down to essentials - every word has to be so perfectly placed - a lesson for me, certainly, Miss Rambler!

Magic - it's magic! Very sexy, love the 'vowels' and 'verbs' references!

J x

MistakenMagic | April 3, 2009 - 17:37

Thank you Jen! Yes, another kinky one ;)

Magic xxx

capoeiragem | April 4, 2009 - 12:08

Economical, sensual, quite simply a great short poem. Nice work! :)

MistakenMagic | April 4, 2009 - 20:49

Thank you Capoeiragem ;) Yes, I've really got a feel for short pieces now!

Magic xxx

Dynamaso | April 5, 2009 - 01:03

Can't say much more than has already been said, Magic. Like this one a lot.

Dynamaso | April 5, 2009 - 01:03

Can't say much more than has already been said, Magic. Like this one a lot.

MistakenMagic | April 5, 2009 - 08:27

So much that you've posted the comment twice Dynamaso ;) Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!

Magic xxx