“Bowing Heads”

I'm really glad you posted this Nathan! It's great to have you back!

Love;

'I follow the curb,
whistling.
I dare not dent
the night
with a false note.'

And the tension that builds fiercely towards the end really makes this poem brilliant. Glad you could share something so personal with us ;)

Magic xxx

Thank you so much Magic. I'm happy to be back too and now that my exams are out of the way I can go back to writing more regularly.

Thank you for your comment and for all your help on this one Magic. Cheers!

Nathan xox

I am very impressed. It's not easy to keep a long poem on track, but you certainly kept me spellbound.

Heh, thanks! I'm glad you liked it. Cheers.

Nathan.

A cherry! A cherry! Well done Nathan, I'm so pleased and so proud of you and this poem ;)

(hope I didn;t sound too much like your mum then!)

Magic xxx

Enjoyed reading, atb Lena

Hehe, well Magic... a bit like my mum, yes... ;-p Thanks a lot though. Your enthusiasm really 'cherried' me up ;-D

Cheers Lena, I'm glad you liked it ;-)

Nathan.

Quite a deep poem, Nathan. I was fascinated by its rhythm.
Well done on the cherry.

Thank you so much Luigi. I appreciate it ;-)

Great read Nathan, you always seem to be able to infuse a lot of atmosphere into your work and this is no exception. It has a kind of 'Phantom of the Opera' feel to it; a mystique that sort of makes the hairs on the back of neck stand up. A journey travelled and a good story it makes too.

Chris ;)

'Phantom of the Opera', eh? ;-D Cheers Chris! I always love reading your comments. They really cheer me up!

I’m glad you like this one, thanks again!

Nathan.

Nathan, I was over the moon you got a cherry for this one. Congratulations;-)

A brilliant poem and definitely one of your best.

Tina x

Thank you so much Tina. I really appreciate your comment and all your help! Cheers!

Nathan xox

Just stunning.

So much that I cannot highlight individual lines.

Really lovely imagery

J x

I've always loved the imagery you use in your poetry, so you complimenting my imagery is especially important to me. Thank you so much Jennifer ;-)

Nathan xox

ditto all the above -am so pleased you got a cherry for this. Margot

Cheers Margot! I appreciate it!

i am very happy to see something new from you...i loved "Malt Scotch" and have been waiting to read more. this piece is quite amazing. it grabs you by the arm and takes you along whether you're scared of the dark or not. i'm with jen..i couldn't even begin to pick out lines...it's all beautiful. congrats on the cherry.

jason

Cheers mate! I'm glad you like this one!

New Nathan Bednarek
On well descriptive
poem "Bowing Heads"
it's amazing and spell! bounding
and the imagery as all say!
Just read and Congrats; on Cherry
First I thought true, then I thought someone in battle
or somone bowing heads in prayer.
Or just imagery.
So it's held secrecy for me.
julie x cavalcader

I really appreciate your comment, dear Julie, and I'm glad you found this poem effective.

To reveal its little secret ;-) this poem is about finding truth in life. For me, it was about finding the true God. I did. I was never drawn to somebody so easily. He showed me what is true in life.

Nathan x

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this Julie. I promise I will read your work soon and I will do my best to keep maturing in mine. God bless you too.

Nathan x

New Nathan How strange! Thankyou so much for replying. I seem have a slight gift of sensing the poem or story and writer, then I ask is it true and 90 out 100 say yes and hint of why.But I have been there to in everything so many God's +Blessings and "Our Lady Of Walsingham's Shrine . 2 wonderful priests looked after me like no others in 16 years worship. That's all I can say now groups and other things in groups all done and expanded in the
"Argus" "The Big Issue"T.Cook Abctales now. read my "Big kiss And Thanks To All." Thankyou's comments please if want.When everything fails. like you even this he leads me on. Somethings
I can and have done now. Read some of mine please
and any remarks an feedback whatever will appreciate. You certainly learnt English very well. I have a job to believe Iv'e done all this.
julie cavalcader x well t Cook states go easy Abctalers as new ones dreams some are.
cos! one never know their lives do they?
keep up your good work God +Bless you to.
julie x cavalcader.

Damn you that is excellent. I had a similar idea a while back and wasted it in a single line... Works on different levels too, well done

Cheers Nick! I appreciate it ;-)

a gem of a poem, very visual and suspenseful (is that a word?)

Hehe, well thank you very much for that Maggy. It's a poem heavy in imagery, so I'm glad you got something from it.

Thanks again.

Nathan x