The smell of the roses almost faded,
but I can always get new ones.
I listen to music, each note sounding more arid
with every small sip of red wine; well, more like a gallon.
I travel to work by car. I take the wrong turn.
I’m late, but I explain that every traffic light was red.
After ten hours of aimless work, I return
home with a plan to go shopping, but I go to the pub instead.
There I order a pint of lager and I drink
it slowly with no intention of getting wasted.
Tomorrow I’ve got another day of work at the bank,
so that I can buy more roses, the smell of which you find sacred.
I may not be perfect. I may have made the wrong choices;
but I am genuine, so is my love and so are the roses...
Comments
Doeslittle | April 29, 2008 - 22:51
Roses to me mean romantic, but they've been used poetically many times and often in a slighty cheesy way so if you use them it has to be utterly brilliant and original. In this poem I felt the last two lines were unnecessary and perhaps as a whole it feels a bit too much like prose - maybe you could clip some of the lines. This, of course, is only my opinion. The idea, however, is very good and I really liked the last line.
Yazmin | October 4, 2008 - 08:33
For me roses symbolise love, but you've made them deeper than that, You are my inspiration! Keep going Nathan Your talent astounds me!!
yaz xx
Nathan Bednarek | October 7, 2008 - 23:19
Yazmin, your comment really made my day. I am so happy that my work appeals to you so much. I never had anyone actually say 'You are my inspiration!' when it came down to my writing, so I can’t quite express how much this means to me.
Again, I thank you for your kind words. I'll keep them close to my heart. Thanks again.
Love, Nathan.
yaerink1203 | November 8, 2008 - 02:16
I just love your poem. I've got to admit... I've read every single story of yours and you really inspire me too. It's startles me to find that you are very talented. Go, Nathan!
Keep writing, you're really good at it.
- Miss_Poet
Nathan Bednarek | November 10, 2008 - 10:34
Now this is turning into a midnight dream ;-p Thank you so much for such a lovely comment. I'm really happy and proud that my work can inspire someone; it's a boost to my confidence. Again, thanks a lot Miss Poet.
Nathan.
JoeAnne | November 17, 2008 - 10:38
I love the poetry you have written here. I have met a person who wrote really great poems when I was on a trip with the Alaska Cruises. I am looking forward to see for another piece of art of yours.Congratulations and keep up the good work.