“Malt Scotch”


from the ABC set Coffee Spoons.

‘Malt Scotch, please, young man;
no rocks, just a splash
of water. Thanks.’

Somebody once said,
if you really want to know
a person’s character, ask them
what they’d like to drink.

With that in mind
one smooth, bluesy evening,
a guy asked a barman
for the self-same thing.

He won’t accept a glass of piss
for what a Scotch is meant to be,
nor will he pollute it with ice.

‘Here you go Sir. That’ll be –’

A freshly-pressed tenner is displayed,
interrupting the young barman.
‘Keep the change.’

He held the glass
in a proud, yet gentle
manner; his baby finger
supporting its base
to keep its frail body
from falling.

He didn’t drink it straight away.
He noticed the label on the bottle
as the drink was being prepared for him.
A twenty-four year old Scotch
deserves some respect.

He glanced at tonight’s entertainment.
A woman. She sang the Blues,
dubbed by two shadows in the background.

With the screaming silence
of her saxophone he watched
the girl end her song.

The glass elevated to his lips
and he took the first sip.

Yes, that was as good as it gets.

First, a tingling
at the tip of his tongue
and the roof of his mouth,
teasing like a feather.

Then, the texture;
mature and sticky,
yet exploratory -
combing his taste buds.

Finally, the spiciness;
irritating, but addictive,
as if somebody put out
a cigarette on his tongue.

With another sip of his drink,
he slithered the restaurant’s corridors;
he kept his eyes on the girl.

He ignored the lady
with a dead fox
around her neck.
Death is the new black.

He ignored the man
that wore sunglasses
in a candlelit room.

He ignored the cliché,
red-dress of a woman
smoking a kebab cigarette.

He ignored the double
chinned man that flirted
with tonight’s specials.

He kept his eyes on the girl.

She was still fiddling
with her saxophone.
Her blues-playing
fingers stroked
all the bits and bobs
with such professionalism.

Her smoky, malted eyes
pierced the instrument,
searching for a false note.
She couldn’t find it.
Her solo was perfect.

Satisfied, she set the saxophone
aside. She stood up
and only then did she notice
the man, just twenty-four
feet away from her.

She looked at his suit.
There was no label on it.

She looked into his eyes
as he halted before her.

She glanced down
at the drink he was holding.

He noticed the distilled smile
that accented the corners of her lips.

He took a sip...

Nathan Bednarek 2009.

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Comments

MistakenMagic | April 26, 2009 - 17:43

You've got some brilliant and original images here Nathan. Especially;

'He ignored the lady
with a dead fox
around her neck.
Death is the new black.'

and

'Her smoky, malted eyes
pierced the instrument,
searching for a false note.
She couldn’t find it.
Her solo was perfect.'

Very atmospheric and thoroughly delicious ;)

Magic xxx

Nathan Bednarek | April 26, 2009 - 18:53

Hehe, thanks Magic. I'm glad you like this one ;-)

Thanks for everything ;-)

xox

Silver Spun Sand | April 26, 2009 - 22:40

The Nathan Bednarek hallmark stamped definitively on this one.

"Very atmospheric and thoroughly delicious ;)"

Couldn't have put it better myself;-)

Tina x

Nathan Bednarek | April 26, 2009 - 22:52

Hehe, thank you Tina. This poem is actually very personal, so I'm glad you like it and thank you for all your comments ;-)

xox

Curse of 222 | May 2, 2009 - 13:21

this poem IS malt scotch! this is smokey and smooth and bluesy. i love it. the structure, tone and imagery are all perfectly complimentary to one another.
fantastic work!

jason

Nathan Bednarek | May 2, 2009 - 15:37

Cheers mate. You made my day with that comment! ;-D

threeleafshamrock | May 24, 2009 - 08:51

So many stand-out lines and parts to this original piece Nathan that it would be impossible to separate. Creates a kind of ambience; an atmosphere. Yes! I think that's the word I'm hunting; 'Atmospheric'. Anyhow, it's bloody good and so well put together. I really enjoyed this and after 2 or 3 readings, I found I liked it more; definitely more than 1 reading required to appreciate fully. Well done!

Chris ;)

Nathan Bednarek | May 25, 2009 - 23:12

... Wow! Now that really boosted my confidence. Your comments are always very important to me. Cheers, I really appreciate it! :-)

Richard L. Prov... | August 5, 2009 - 02:15

Yes Nathan, very well done. Your creation almost made me wish to be that gentleman, waiting anxiously, catching the eye of the entertainer, while hesitating with a scotch; a parallel of pleasure. Only after you sipped with your eyes could you down the remaining moisture. Yes, well done. Richard LP

Nathan Bednarek | August 19, 2009 - 17:54

Cheers!

Richard L. Prov... | August 20, 2009 - 01:42

Chimo! RLP

Nathan Bednarek | October 23, 2009 - 01:21

;-)

ScoZen | December 22, 2010 - 17:07

ScoZen

Witaj Nathan.

A suit with no label and twentyfour year old malt that cost a tenner?
I liked the "...he slithered the restaurant’s corridors..."

Na zdowie

Nathan Bednarek | June 20, 2011 - 22:25

Dziekuje! ;-)