That scheduled moment –
a moment when the world
within the pocket of my
Leather-like jacket
vibrates – a call on hold;
a voice to recognize.
As the ringtone plays –
‘Sail away with me honey’
- my eager hand searches
the pocket like a maze
thinking it’s just somebody
with a list of questions;
but it is a voice to recognize
even before I answer
as the nickname says ‘hi’.
The ringtone replays
once it reaches my ear
as the voice says ‘hi’ –
and the scheduled moments
of silent reflection
at one end of the call
and hours of seconds
of thoughts at inspection –
a common ‘hey there’ stalls...
Comments
Silver Spun Sand | August 30, 2008 - 16:57
'Sail away with me honey' one of my favourite songs and this indeed an extremely pleasing poem.
Skilfull indeed to write a poem that is indeed just a snapshot, if you like, of a few fleeting moments and all the more effective for that.
Tina
Nathan Bednarek | September 2, 2008 - 13:57
Thanks for your comment Tina. I'm glad you liked it. ;-)
MistakenMagic | September 2, 2008 - 17:00
'That scheduled moment –
a moment when the world
within the pocket of my
Leather-like jacket
vibrates – a call on hold;
a voice to recognize.'
I loved the first stanza. It emphasizes how this may just seem like a simple thing but to the person it means so much more than that.
Caolan_le_Paddy | September 12, 2008 - 16:46
"my eager hand searches
the pocket like a maze
thinking it’s just somebody
with a list of questions;"
Imaginative way of going about it, never would have thought of it myself really heh.
You've turned a simple action into something great, some good talent showing :)
Bradene | October 2, 2008 - 14:58
For a Seventeen year old I find your poetry exremely mature and sensitve. I've read a few now and I'm sure I will keep going till I'm through the lot.
More comments later. Val
tamara | October 3, 2008 - 18:46
Hi Nathan!hope you are ok,I was thinking just the other day what Bradene has written down,for your age it is very sensitive,It says a lot about you,all positive of course!you are on your way to great success,well done.Lynne
Nathan Bednarek | October 7, 2008 - 17:19
Hey Val! Thanks a lot for your lovely comment and I see it as a great compliment that you would take the time and read through my work. That really encourages me to keep writing. Again, thank you. ;-)
Hey Tamara (or is it Lynne? ;-p) Thank you so much for your comment. I'm glad that my work always seems to appeal to you. It's very nice of you that you always leave a comment and your encouraging words mean a lot to me ;-)
Nathan.