“Storming sin”


from the ABC set Transparent mirrors.

The wicked deeds,
Like wind and storm,
That speeds and speeds,
Moulding a form,
The conscience of which bleeds,
The red soul of evil it performed.

Your own hands,
The murder weapon
Of the lowlands,
The necropolis that is hidden
Within your heart, which demands
Treason.

You surrender
To the shout of hate,
Of your anger,
Which becomes your fate
The moment you pull the trigger.

Now look down upon the corpse of your crime,
The rage you have not controlled,
The ghost that will hunt you until the end of time,
So you remember when your blood turned cold,
And the soul you have sold...

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Comments

Bradene | October 3, 2008 - 12:15

Wow! this is really a very powerful piece. Again written with some maturity. Val

Nathan Bednarek | October 7, 2008 - 23:04

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. It's a very old poem, so I'm glad it has enough maturity in it as I wrote it when I was still a very inexperienced writer (though I still have a lot to learn).

Thanks again.

Nathan.

Beeme | October 19, 2008 - 14:08

This is an amazing piece. It carries a strong message. Boy I wish I could write lik this!!
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Nathan Bednarek | October 22, 2008 - 09:33

You definitely could and you definitely can ;-)

Thanks a lot for your lovely comment ;-)

Nathan.