Sun downers on the hill
With a view to the plains
Seven of us
Further from home
Than we would care to admit
New creatures reborn
Into this African life
An evening extravagant with the
Soft scent of leather
The touch of wine
Like honey to the talking tongue
Seven stories sung
We have no past
The present holds us
In her elegant arms
There is no park bench
No bone broken
None to contradict this version of events
Only the faintest ricochet of
An uninformed rumour
Comes at us from the hills
The light is changing
The sun oozes blood orange
Into a firefly sky
Giraffe sail the valley like poetry
I see the stork dip
In the mirror of your eye
Smile to see the white linen
Of my smock drenched by the late light
Turning into a red dress

Comments
Jasper_Milvain | May 9, 2009 - 21:31
There are some really nice phrases in this:
The touch of wine
Like honey to the talking tongue
is really nice.
Thanks.
JM.
hilary west | May 10, 2009 - 00:56
I liked this a lot. It must stand a good chance of winning. Good Luck.
Mangone | May 10, 2009 - 09:15
Yes, it's very effective and very poetic.
I like the line that follows the two you mention, JM:
Seven stories sung.
Maybe seven songs of past problems left behind and future hopes to be found in the wine red, rosy chalice of a new chance.
jennifer | May 18, 2009 - 22:02
Some beautiful imagery, and a cleverly subtle weaving in of the two phrases; they were so seamlessly included that I barely noticed them, well done!
J x