'Hey you there, no not her
You,Yes You standing there
In your Grey striped suit
As if your going to a teddy
Bears picnic, with that stupid
Hat that makes you look like
A gangster in the 30's or so.
Well come here I Said, whats
The matter with you man, hard
Of hearing like most in here
Or pretending like the rest.
If I could come over there
You idiot don't you think I
Would, sheer brilliance of
Brains these days is astonishing
Shit, I may add.
Finally you've come over
I'm on a tight schedule
Encase its slipped you're
"Mind, while you're happy"
Drinking my wine.
Well here's what I wanted
To say, "What the fuck
Do you, think you're doing here"
At my penultimate party I might
Add well not this again,the Silent
Treatment is for kids but then again
You don't exactly look 66.
Any way if you won't talk
I will just go ahead and say it
Again, who invited you
I don't remember you on my list.
Come to think of it Or many others
I can see.but now I realized who you are
The leeches that can't wait to pounce
And have their blood meal.
I can see I'm wasting my time
With you and their playing my
favorite song, so I supposed
I better leave now so the show
Can finally go on.
But before I do, you and all
That never cared for me,
Remember I'm watching you and will haunt
You all year through if You dare
Contest my will'.
Comments
MistakenMagic | September 9, 2011 - 21:43
A really great monologue, prettyrose, with a generous dollop of humour! This would be a great spoken word poem. Just watch your apostrophes - "Mind, while your happy" and "Do you think your doing here" should both be 'you're' and "wont" should be 'won't'. Pesky typos I'm sure, just want this poem to be the best it can be!
Magic xxx
Prettyrose | September 10, 2011 - 00:00
Hi Magic. Thank you for taking the time to read my work.
That's find I don't mind comments that are for helping :) I know I get things missed or mixed and most of the time I get away with it :) but to be honest I did this after a recent bereavement and not fully with it.
I appreciate your comments and again thank you for reading.
Keep Writing
Keep Smiling :) x
Prettyrose | September 10, 2011 - 00:09
Hi Magic again, If I have missed any more I shall edit when in a better frame of mind, but thank you again.
:) x
MistakenMagic | September 10, 2011 - 00:12
No problem, prettyrose - I just wanted this poem to reach its true potential! And I'm so sorry for your loss, my thoughts are with you and I hope you feel better soon.
Magic xxx
Highhat | September 10, 2011 - 01:37
A very good one Pretty Rose. Do try to tidy it up and it will be perfect. A brilliant title...
;)Pia
Prettyrose | September 13, 2011 - 10:59
Hi Magic :) I appreciate your help in wanting my work to reach its peak. And thank you for your kind words. Like all of us we carry on regardless adjusting to situations but your words are so much appreciated.
Keep writing
Keep Smiling :) x
Prettyrose | September 13, 2011 - 11:01
Hi Pia :) thank you for reading my poem and comments,which I appreciate you taking the time too leave and which made me laugh (which I need right now so thanks)
Keep Writing
Keep Smiling :)))