I can't understand your grief,
nor can I imagine what life
could of been for me, if
I had to suffer the same.
Or shed so many tears
I watch you part with, hour after
Hour, day after day.
And when you feel some courage
Creep your way, you know
Trying to maintain it will be hard,
As you know your hurt will
Not let happiness pass your way.
I know life for you will Never
Be the same, and you may not feel
Such warmth You can get from seeing a love one
Marry, or success after finally gaining that
Back breaking promotion you worked so hard to
Achieve, Or even the tingling feeling you get when
Some one kisses you again for the first time.
But when you close your eyes
And think of a place or time,
Or person that once gave you
A parcel of peace and joy,
Grab it with all you inner strength
Way deep in all that dark
Angry martyrdom and make
once again sunshine flow through
Your window of pain!
Comments
Highhat | June 5, 2011 - 04:21
third line "could have been". A poignant poem!
Pia
Cavalcaderl | June 5, 2011 - 08:37
new Prettyrose
Good poem full of images.
stnaza I like is;
The last
But when you close your eyes
And think of a place or time,
Or a person that once gave you
A parcel of peace and joy,
Grab it with all your strength
Way deep in all that dark
Angry martyrdom and make
once agin sunshine flow through
Your window of pain.
So true! loved it.
Sounds like magic stardust, give me some?
julie x
Prettyrose | June 5, 2011 - 23:41
Hi pia :) thank you for taking the time to read my work and thank you for your comments all appreciated :) and although I proof read it 3 times lol its shows having inspirational thoughts/poems early hours of the morning is not good, so yes I agree one could use 'could have been'
Keep smiling
Keep Writing :)))))
Prettyrose | June 5, 2011 - 23:46
Hi Julie :) I appreciate your comments and taking the time to read my poem.
I do not have magic stardust sorry lol but your welcome to what i do, and that is to take deep breath find my happy spot and laugh, daily!! so far its worked for me :) even the hard times.
Thank you so much again for your time and lovely comments.
Keep Smiling!
Keep Writing.
T x
animan | June 13, 2011 - 18:35
yes, great poem - who's it addressed to, though, I found mysef wondering. Some angsty dude, oneself, yourself? genuine question.
please note what Pia says tho': of to have , ple4ase, pretty please.
animan | June 13, 2011 - 18:38
All right - of to 've at least??
heartbreaking to see such a great poem harmed by succcccchhhhh a tiny itsy thing.
Prettyrose | June 18, 2011 - 01:10
Thank you for taking the time to read my poem Animan and I appreciate your kind and varied comments :)
Yes early hours of the morning does wounders for my creative writing to kick in but not to put in down on paper and computer lol so again hands up to errors lol.It's for any one that is finding it hard to cope and an inspirational one I hope :)
However sorry I could not see what you meant is wrong in your second message 'of to 've at least'
But again early hours syndrome brain eyes shut down and hands but the brain is awake ha ha.
Keep Writing
Keep Smiling.
two_gents | June 19, 2011 - 01:38
Tommy Glynn Cheshire
Hi! Pretty Rose?
I see you keep refering to the 'Lateness of the Hour'? I find also that I can get my act together late on but if you read all mine you will fins all my work Is rhytmic. So as one of you critics comments on some of your terminology, it is up to the individual to put on 'paper' or in our case, the screen what is suitable for us at that time.
I was at a big conference in Hollywood LA in 2002 at a comp run by Poetry,Com, $500 poets all in one room over the Kodak building you see on TV awards shows. (gone out of the game now) and I commented on some of the work of abnother poet and a man, who was high up in the Publishing Company in Maryland said just that? It might seem implausible to you but at the time of the contributer writing it it was suitable for them. Just keep plodding and do what you thyink is best at the time.
See you?
tommy
two_gents | June 19, 2011 - 01:49
Tommy Glynn Cheshire
Sorry about the spelling mistakes. but as 'you do' I will blame the latenes of the Hour??
cheers
tommy
Prettyrose | August 12, 2011 - 01:22
Hi Tommy, Sorry its taken so long to reply.
Thank you for your time and comments, they were appreciated, like your support :)
For me it has and always will be about 'the message' not the way its put down, I do not follow trends, rights e.t.c in writing, I follow my heart and passion and hope it helps.
If I were a teacher then I would care more for the students sake, but im not so don't hehe.
Thank you again and lets plod on together how we want to lol
Dont be sorry about the spelling, I'm not lol :)
Keep writing
Keep Smiling :)
Trish :)
two_gents | August 12, 2011 - 11:36
Tommy Glynn Cheshire
Hi! P/Rose
thanks for your reply.
I have recently posted another item on my site and as it is a joke you may want to read it?
Cheers
Tommy