A Story to begin with,
So fresh and interesting,
Which captures my eager eyes,
Your warm, yet different exterior
Ignites my quench for more of,
The twists and turns
That keeps me interested.
But even with the gripping
Delights you give me, and the elegant way
You entice me to turn over your page,
Without even a pause to think or take a break,
There are times when I wounder
Wether we are truly
Going to bond,or if were are from two different
Elements that can be enjoyed by each other
Only enduring minutes, rather than
years.
I am not sure if we will
Reach the end together,
But I cannot deny you have given me
more lust for life and passion than I can ever remember, the expereicne with you is some times misunderstood, yet unique that will last with me forever.
Comments
shoe | January 15, 2011 - 16:49
I like this, especially the middle stanza, I did notice a couple of rouge commas and typos which interrupt the flow a bit.
Prettyrose | January 15, 2011 - 23:48
Hi Shoe, thank you for taking the time to read my poem and comments are always welcome :) Yes I know thanks&even with excuses of a rough day yesterday and the time i decided to create a poem, I still agree with you it could put people off.
take care :)
skinner_jennifer | January 16, 2011 - 00:14
Hi Prettyrose,
what a beautiful poem this is, full of mystery,
"will she, won't she?" Love is such a mysterious
thing, none of us can be sure of love, but we have
to take a chance, this was how I read your poem.
By the way I read your comment on my poem, thankyou
so much for your comment. I left a message for you,
sorry it was a bit late, only just got around to
reading comments on some of my old stuff.
Thanks again and thankyou for a great read.
Jenny.
Prettyrose | January 19, 2011 - 02:26
hi Jenny :) thank you again for reading my poem and commenting, it means alot. I am glad you enjoyed it and regarding your poem yes i loved it and I know what you mean it takes me time to read what people put on the old and the new.
I am slowly going round yours lol because there so good. thank you again for taking the time to read my work when I know your busy. But when I get comments like yours I am happy becuase if one person and as talented has you, enjoys my work then I feel I have done something worth while through my work.