Lets start again, she said out, as she looked up
At the face, tense and flushed, looking down
He had pushed, he had touched, he had held her
But her face wore no bliss, just a frown
‘Go behind. Hold my hips. Start off gently’
So he waited and she turned around
Soon he started again, as instructed
Her spine dipped and position was found
He laboured, once more, this time smiling
And she pushed her head back, breathing in
There, he knew he never could leave her
While his lips kissed her warm, yielded skin
Comments
russiandoll | July 7, 2011 - 19:22
just made a wee tweaking change at the end... didn't quite feel right so had to go back!
Good luck everyone :)))
Silver Spun Sand | July 7, 2011 - 20:51
And the same to you, russiandoll;-)
Liked...a lot.
Tina
russiandoll | July 8, 2011 - 18:42
Thank you :))
MistakenMagic | July 11, 2011 - 15:45
Very interesting take on the comp, russiandoll. Good luck!
Magic xxx
russiandoll | July 12, 2011 - 15:32
Thanks so much for your comment MistakenMagic. I wanted to try something that was completely out of my comfort zone for this - it feels odd and I'm still not settled on the last lines but it's been a hugely thought provoking exercise. Love ABCTales... :) Thx again :)
russiandoll | August 5, 2011 - 14:54
THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE CHERRIES!!!! Delighted!!!! You've made my Friday :)))))