beat-up pick-up trucks
and worn out ideals
acid rain
and gasoline rainbows
(the stray cat
comes and goes
like a Cheshire feeling)
anathema
anathema
watered down philosophy
and feel-good irony,
the great metaphoric marathon
picking up where it started
going in circles
in and out the door,
burn it down
less is more
anathema
Comments
maisie | May 9, 2011 - 03:39
very enjoyable... you could do 'less is more' a bit more though... and make the poem smaller by taking out odd words...
Highhat | May 9, 2011 - 16:15
no critique from me just plain good
;)Pia
ScoZen | May 9, 2011 - 19:42
snelson hello.
I can just see them driving by.
"...beat-up pick-up trucks..." through "...gasoline rainbows..."
A philosopher on the road.
seannelson | May 10, 2011 - 18:26
thank you kindly Pia, everybody