the entry signs
and the exit signs,
all the failed roses
you bought at the store,
the hard knock lessons
you learned too late
what for
the novels you've read
and the text-books you skimmed,
all the things you've seen
and the few you really observed
seems you always get stuck
in between,
catch every unlucky break,
a farcical tragedy
too stupid to fake
taking the entry signs
and the exit signs
looking for a store
that sells roses
Comments
fatboy74 | May 14, 2011 - 20:53
Really like this. :-)
mikepyro | May 14, 2011 - 21:07
Something about this was really solid overall, the voice isn't astouding or flowery or complex, it's just a powerful piece that speaks to the reader.
I especially loved the second set of stanzas.
I'll admit I was shaky at the start because i found I was expecting another cliche life poem (hard knock lessons) but it evolved into a sparse but emotional little piece. Well done.
Highhat | May 15, 2011 - 08:49
Very good- I enjoyed it
;)Pia
JoseHdz | May 15, 2011 - 09:22
lovely. great ending. congrats on well deserved cherry!
seannelson | May 15, 2011 - 12:22
thanks all
celticman | May 15, 2011 - 22:28
Yep, wonderful. Works for me.