To the You in the Queue

By Shannan

Fri, 01 Aug 2014
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To the You in the Queue

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It was purely by chance

That I landed up in that queue;

Because the machine wasn’t working,

I ended up in front of you.

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You stood and chatted to me,

Like we were old friends;

And I responded so easily,

Happily, without defense.

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When I raised my eyes,

Yours were looking into mine,

A piercingly soft icy blue,

Tagged with mirth-lines on the side.

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You wore a hat of green,

And a look that seemed so keen;

Chatting with ease felt so good,

Whilst we stood in that queue.

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I love that you made me smile,

It felt wrong when my turn was up;

Lord, please may I see those eyes again,

Just so I can ask their name…

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Then the voice in my head says:

“He would have if he was…

Stop making up stories!”

 

Certificate U
Poem
Poetry
Romance

Comments

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Shannan

I wanted you to keep making up stories - because this was a good beginning to one, and with enough detail for the reader to want to know what happened next. Is it based on real life?

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Shannan on

Yes ma'am, he was going to see a film festival movie on his own and I was going to see a different film festival movie on my own... wonder if he enjoyed his, mine was incredibly thought-provoking... Thanks so much for your comment and encouragement. $

 

Submitted by jolono on

Hi Shannan. Find out where he lives and stalk him! Joking.... Sometimes we meet people and they have an effect on us. One day you'll have that effect on someone... Trust me.  It happens.

 

Submitted by Shannan on

Thanks j, such a kind thing to type at the end there, and yes I believe it's truth... I think my story may be so different because its been a life journey in faith...

For the first part, I know you are joking, and it's not possible for me to do any stalking without his name.... but still I wouldn't go sneaking behind someone's back without them knowing I'm there looking them up. I think 'stalking' someone without being able to contact them or speak to them makes the stalker rather deceitful, insecure, deluded, and I could even argue cowardly too. If you can't be open and honest with the person and tell them that you like them, and you can't have a conversation with them about your truth, then how could you possibly date them, nevermind marry them? Why can't they communicate directly with the stalkee? Most likely because they have issues they need to resolve and they should be spending their time and money on that instead of wasting it in the delusion that what they are doing is 'healthy', 'normal' and/or 'loving', because it is not. 

Secondly, I've already had that effect on a few people. If I look back, I've turned down so many it's ridiculous. I've even had a guy's dad give me permission to be his daughter-in-law! Whilst his son was battling to figure out what to say to me, it was so sweet. The problem is I've never been able to reciprocate any of their love from my soul... it's just all really strange... a guy says "I love you" and I feel nothing at all... how could I fake that and tell him I love him that way too - for me that's as deceitful and manipulative as anything else, worse in fact, because if you lie, you're manipulating someone's soul! Hmmmm... like you typed, it happens...