I would

Posted by shoe on February 8, 2010 - 15:00
from the ABC set Some kind of poetry

I would pencil you an attic
to archive childish doubts.
Paint a hatch of primary colours,
Crayon on a lock.

I would use spilt pools of India ink
for where the darkness lies,
Fingerprinting every doorway
with an indigo surmise.

In pastel shades and charcoal,
I would sketch your history,
Blur and smudge the edges,
Defining only me.

I would outline you on parchment.
Trace around your soul.
Brush away the chalk dust,
To let your colours show.

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Comments

'I would sketch your history,
Blur and smudge the edges,
Defining only me.'

- just love these lines, Shoe! And this is a truly wonderful poem - definitely one of my favourites of yours ;) Well done on this one!

Magic xxx

Wow Shoe! I absolutely adore this x It is beautiful in it's construction , imagery and emotion x:)

Magic, you say the nicest things, My confidence truly appeciates your words,:~}

"I would pencil you an attic
to archive childish doubts."

Shirley, I just love these opening lines. The whole theme is brilliant and works really well. Clever stuff.

David xx

firebird, Wow, a wow is wonderful from you, many many thanks,

Thank you so much David, I find it impossible to decide if I like what I have written, so your approval is more than welcome and means so much,

Shirley xx

This is so beautiful Shoe, I love the idea of redefining the person.

My favourite stanza;

'In pastel shades and charcoal,
I would sketch your history,
Blur and smudge the edges,
Defining only me.'

Beeme xx

I think this may be my favourite bit too, though a little egocentric! though there are some bits my history that could do with some smudging,:~}