In the dark,
you reach for me
and it's easy to surrender,
for the body knows nothing
of secrets, of guilt, of blame,
It loves in the moment
with no history to hark back to,
no future to fathom.
Just giving and taking,
here and now.
For a short while
I slip free,
give in to the learned responses,
the reflex actions, this faux loving.
The air cools between us
and the grey light defines
your eyes, questioning?,
I turn toward the window
in mock bravery,
as if I welcome the day.
Comments
RachelPatricia | September 17, 2010 - 11:21
Really enjoyed this, shoe. Perfect final lines to each stanza, and so atmospheric I could almost taste the tension. Simply brilliant :)
Rachel xx
Silver Spun Sand | September 17, 2010 - 15:18
I agree with Rachel. Very evocative.
Tina
shoe | September 17, 2010 - 16:27
Thanks Rachel & Tina, glad you enjoyed.
RachelPatricia | September 17, 2010 - 16:38
:) xx
Dodgystrawberry | September 17, 2010 - 19:53
Yes, Rachel & Tina have summed it up perfectly!
fatboy74 | September 17, 2010 - 21:00
I missed this earlier Shoe and am glad I found it now - what a clearly defined and tender poem. Agree with all the above. :-)
Kahdai | September 17, 2010 - 21:40
Shoe this is lovely & maybe part sad? K
shoe | September 18, 2010 - 08:13
Dodgystrawberry and fatboy74, thanks for reading and pleased you like it. Kahdai, I'm glad you felt the sadness.
Kahdai | September 19, 2010 - 15:41
It was 'visible' to me ;) maybe I know the feeling K x
MistakenMagic | September 19, 2010 - 22:13
'for the body knows nothing
of secrets, of guilt, of blame,
It loves in the moment
with no history to hark back to,
no future to fathom.
Just giving and taking,
here and now.'
- wow, these lines are just FANTASTIC! Well done, Shirley ;)
Magic xxx
shoe | September 20, 2010 - 17:27
Oh, thanks Magic, in truth it was going to be lives in the moment, but I mis-typed it, so pleased you liked it, it means a lot,:}
kheldar | November 4, 2010 - 19:11
Whilst conceding that sex is a natural, animalistic act you nonetheless make it a beautiful thing.
The way you couch the feeling of not wanting the moment to end is bith raw and moving.
xx :--)
shoe | November 5, 2010 - 10:16
I guess I was trying to blur the lines between love and sex and all the stuff in between, I'm glad you liked the ending, it's my favourite part.