The Mirror


from the ABC set They don't mean to, but they do

These new strands of silver are a legacy
along with the concerned look around the eyes,
she must have looked like this,

-That time I woke-
trying to tease out the thorn in my hand,
and when I had that fever, her fingers
stroking back my home cut fringe.

Two memories of the touch of her,
I keep separate from the stiff embraces,
the reaching across, touching glass.

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Comments

MistakenMagic | March 6, 2010 - 10:57

This is beautiful, Shirley - such tender and delicate images.

Just spotted a typo - 'seperate' should be 'separate' ;)

I really like this one, well done!

Magic xxx

insertponceyfre... | March 6, 2010 - 11:07

echoing Magic - beautiful and simple poem Shoe!

Beeme | March 6, 2010 - 11:21

I agree with the above :) Beautiful, sincere, heart-warming.

Beeme xx

shoe | March 6, 2010 - 11:52

Oops, thanks Magic, corrected now, pleased you liked,:~}

shoe | March 6, 2010 - 11:54

Thanks IPF and Beeme, for reading and your encouraging words,:~}

kheldar | March 6, 2010 - 11:58

I can say no different to what has already been said, yet again yoy imbue a few simple worlds with a whole heap of emotion.

David xx

P.S. if anyone asks, tell 'em the "silver streaks" are veeery expensive highlights

shoe | March 6, 2010 - 19:35

Could start a new trend! lol. in truth I am much too vain to let them show, but roots didn't have quite the same poetic ring to it,:~D

jennifer | March 7, 2010 - 14:10

Some great imagery,

J x

Silver Spun Sand | March 7, 2010 - 19:05

Just wonderful, Shirley. It has all been said;-)

T x

Nathan Bednarek | March 7, 2010 - 21:38

Genius.

Kahdai | March 7, 2010 - 21:58

I'm secretly proud of my odd bits of grey,
although I do attempt to hide them away,
my mamas hair has darkened instead! xx K

shoe | March 8, 2010 - 09:54

Thank you J, Tina and Nathan, I'm particularly pleased you liked this one, it is close to me.

Kahdai, grey is a sign of wisdom, yes? :~}

Kahdai | March 8, 2010 - 19:32

Wisdom, age or stress, more like 'experience of life' I think. :)

Firebird | March 9, 2010 - 20:55

Such a lovely poem Shirley x:)