All the miles, all the dirty drive thorough towns
the greasy roads and soot rimed pavements
all the weeks and months and dreams of rain
and grey, grey, grey days
all the sore eyed nights, the thud of defeat
hammering, trammeling, back-beating my heart
has come to this;
A reticent sun
warming a sleeping cat
the burble of rock doves
the flick of the thrush
and somewhere so close
I can hardly bear to not go
a scattering of light
on a Seconal Ocean
Comments
Beeme | January 17, 2011 - 18:47
So beautiful Shoe, I love this!
Beeme xx
insertponceyfre... | January 17, 2011 - 19:46
me too - it's fantastic - especially the last few lines. It's spelt seconal as far as i know
fatboy74 | January 17, 2011 - 20:44
Pretty wonderful and very sad.
seashore | January 17, 2011 - 21:27
Melancholy not sad for me but a ovely piece either way. Just off to look up `seconol/seconal'.....(definition of, never mind spelling!).
Cavalcaderl | January 17, 2011 - 21:37
new shoe
well deserved cherry!
full of colour images.
What is seconal please
Dictionary of mine doesn't
show it.Words great
a reticent sun
warming a sleeping cat
nice.
julie xx
insertponceyfre... | January 17, 2011 - 21:38
it's a barbiturate - sleeping pill - a very strong one
ScoZen | January 17, 2011 - 21:40
Hello Shoe.
Sad and nice to read.
This reminds me of a recent long, long drive back from up North.
I was glad to return and look out at my ocean.
Kind regards
SundaysChild | January 17, 2011 - 22:31
This is stunning shoe xx
shoe | January 18, 2011 - 13:52
Thank you all for your encouraging comments, It gives me heart.
Thanks Poncey, I think you can spell it either way, maybe with an 'a' is the English version, so I'll change it.
MistakenMagic | January 20, 2011 - 13:23
'A reticent sun
warming a sleeping cat
the burble of rock doves
the flick of the thrush'
- love these lines, Shirley! A poem for the sense, no doubt about that. Well done on the cherry!
Magic xxx
Silver Spun Sand | January 21, 2011 - 11:17
Shirley - only just come across this. It is beautiful and the lines that Magic quotes, pure magic;-)
Congrats on the well deserved cherry;-)
Tina
kheldar | February 8, 2011 - 17:53
This is one of those poems that I hope are of the imagination rather than of experience.
An excellent piece.
:--) xxx