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I really like this shoe!

Thanks IPFN!

Simple and beautiful, just like me, but without the beautiful part, me that is, not your poem, the poem is beautiful AND simple, I is just simple, i'll be going now.

David xx

Aaw shoe, I don't know what your thought behind this is, it seems very sad, it is beautiful though. K xx

On your beauty I could not comment!:~D
of your simplicity, I think not.:~}

P.S, you made me smile.

This is so beautiful, Shirley. I love your delicate imagery that gives a soft yet sad air to the poem. Well done!

Magic xxx

Thanks Magic, pleased the sadness showed through for you.

Ah, Kahdai, it is sad isn't it. I actually felt happy when writing it, but it is something I have thought about for a while. glad you think it beautiful.

Also meant to say, I thought it might be too obvious what it is about, now I'm not sure it is obvious enough. it's hard to be objective on your own stuff. if anyone has an opinion I'd be glad to hear it!

Hi Shirley,

I could be way of beam here, but I read it as a woman wanting a baby but there being no man in her life, or at least non man who is willing, to fulfill his side of the biological miracle.

David

I kind of agree with Kheldar, in as much as the failed pregnancy goes but not sure that there is a longing for a baby or a man; more an observation. Lovely poem though, really enjoyed.
Of course, it is a well known fact that every woman needs a man, I mean phff...everyone knows that, don't they? ;) LOL

Nice one Shirley ;)

Chris

Thanks Guys, it's really interesting to hear a male take on it, and you both have great insight, maybe it was just obvious enough then!!!

And Chris, A woman needs a man like a tea needs sugar!

Aaw! that's what I thought it was wanting a baby & couldn't have one! I then wondered if it was my own longing for a baby influenced that reading! Kahdai xx

Great poem, but it should be 'existence'.

I especially like the line:

'Endings masquerade as promises.'

J x

Thanks Jennifer and well spotted, corrected now.:}